CONSTRUCTIVE CRIT ONLY PLEASE! See transcript below.
I took ASL at Gallaudet 4 years ago & I haven't been able to practice since, so...
This is what I MEANT to sign (or now wish I'd signed!), I know there are many mistakes in the video itself (and more than the ones annotated)! I'm particularly interested if anyone has tips in regards to the below translation:
Please remember me, happily
PLEASE REMEMBER ME HAPPY, PAST
By the rosebush laughing
THERE BUSH ROSE LAUGH
With bruises on my chin, the time when
PURPLE BLUE (spots on chin). REMEMBER?
We counted every black car passing
TWO-OF-US COUNT BLACK CAR PASS+
Your house beneath the hill and up until
YOU HOUSE HILL THERE, UP-UNTIL
Someone caught us in the kitchen
PERSON CAUGHT TWO-OF-US WHERE? KITCHEN
With maps, a mountain range, a piggy bank
HAVE MAP (there line) MOUNTAIN, PIG BANK
A vision too removed to mention
PLAN SILLY, DOESN'T-MATTER
But please remember me, fondly
BUT PLEASE REMEMBER ME, FOND
I heard from someone you're still pretty
HEAR YOU CONTINUE BEAUTIFUL
And then they went on to say that the Pearly Gates
HEAR FENCE HEAVEN
Had some eloquent graffiti
FANCY WRITE SPRAY
Like 'We'll meet again' and 'Fuck the man'
EXAMPLE "MEET AGAIN WILL, "F-K MAN
And 'Tell my mother not to worry'
"TELL MY MOM WORRY NOT
And angels with their great handshakes
ANGEL SKILLED HANDSHAKE
But always done in such a hurry
BUT ALWAYS QUICK FINISHED
And please remember me, at Halloween
PLEASE REMEMBER ME, PAST
Making fools of all the neighbors
TEASE+++ NEIGHBORS+++
Our faces painted white, by midnight
TWO-OF-US MAKE-UP WHITE, MIDNIGHT ARRIVE
We'd forgotten one another
FORGET EACH-OTHER
And when the morning came I was ashamed
NEXT MORNING, ASHAMED
Only now it seems so silly
BUT NOW LOOK-BACK? SILLY
That season left the world and then returned
SEASON GO-AND-COME-BACK
And now you're lit up by the city
NOW YOU SHINE, WHY? CITY
So please remember me, mistakenly
PLEASE REMEMBER ME, PAST MISTAKE ME
In the window of the tallest tower
TOWER WINDOW THERE ME
Call, then pass us by but much too high
CALL(down) THERE PEOPLE WALK, ME HIGH
To see the empty road at happy hour
CAN'T SEE EMPTY ROAD, WHY? HAPPY HOUR
Gleam and resonate just like the gates
SHINE LOOKS-LIKE FENCE
Around the Holy Kingdom
AROUND HEAVEN
With words like, 'Lost and found' and 'Don't look down'
SPRAY WORDS "LOST, FOUND "LOOK-DOWN NOT
And 'Someone save temptation'
"PLEASE SAVE TEMPT
And please remember me as in the dream
PLEASE REMEMBER ME SAME-AS DREAM WAY-BACK
We had as rug burned babies
TWO-OF-US BABIES DREAM
Among the fallen trees and fast asleep
AMONG TREE+++ FALL, ASLEEP
Beside the lions and the ladies
NEAR LION LADY
That called you what you like and even might
THEY CALL NAME YOU LIKE, IF YOU GOOD MAYBE
Give a gift for your behavior
GIVE-GIFT
A fleeting chance to see a trapeze
ALLOW WATCH T-R-A-P-E-Z-E
Swinger high as any savior
SWING-ER HIGH SAME-AS SAVIOR
But please remember me, my misery
BUT PLEASE REMEMBER ME, PAST
And how it lost me all I wanted
HOW DEPRESS LOST ALL WANT
Those dogs that love the rain and chasing trains
DOGS THEY LOVE RAIN, TRAIN CHASE
The colored birds above their running
COLOR BIRD ABOVE, DOG RUN
In circles round the well and where it spells
WELL(water there) AROUND
On the wall behind St. Peter
NEAR BEHIND SAINT P-E-T-E-R-'S
So bright on cinder gray in spray paint
WALL GRAY, SPRAY BRIGHT
'Who the hell can see forever?'
"WHO HELL CAN SEE ALWAYS?
And please remember me, seldomly
PLEASE REMEMBER ME SELDOM, PAST
In the car behind the carnival
THERE CAR NEAR CARNIVAL
My hand between your knees, you turn from me
ME TOUCH BETWEEN YOU K-N-E-E, YOU LOOK-AWAY
And said the trapeze act was wonderful
SAY SWING-ER ACT WONDERFUL
But never meant to last, the clowns that passed
BUT CAN'T CONTINUE, CLOWS WALK-BY
Saw me just come up with anger
SAW-ME, ME-LOOK-UP ANGRY
When it filled with circus dogs, the parking lot
PARKING AREA GATHERED DOGS CARNIVAL
Had an element of danger
FEEL DANGER
So please remember me, finally
PLEASE REMEMER ME LAST, PAST
And all my uphill clawing
CLIMBING DIFFICULT
My dear, but if I make the Pearly Gates
SWEATHEART IF ME ACHIEVE FENCE HEAVEN
I'll do my best to make a drawing
ME TRY DRAW PICTURE
Of God and Lucifer, a boy and girl
GOD, LUCIFER. BOY, GIRL.
An angel kissin' on a sinner
ANGEL KISS SINNER
A monkey and a man, a marching band
MONKEY, MAN. MARCH PLAY
All around the frightened trapeze swinger
ALL SURROUND SCARED T-R-A-P-E-Z-E SWING-ER
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She's kinda pretty, nice curves
TrainmasterCurt 1 year ago
Shave your skull
turkaygob2 1 year ago
Looks good to me !!
garbagewarrior 1 year ago