My Last Tears-Dear Darling (original song)

hi this my composition.hope you will like it^^

"october09/ i work presently on a new song so subrscribe to know when my song will be online=)

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lycris:
Dear Darling,
i have one thing to tell you
but i dont think that you will understand
what i would like to say
i would like to say
that i love you

i remember the day where i see you
for the first time
a girl with glow eyes
by a beautiful brown hair
thats what i see here
i dont want to be alone
in this place that i call home
i want to be with you
and i want to love you
so be with me
can you give me wing
to fly
i will take you to the moon
i will take you soon
in the afternoon

Category:

Music

Tags:

• dear
• darling
• second
• hand
• serenade
• composition
• yannick
• never
• shout
• say
• moon

[justjessica95]

did you write this song hun?. even if you didnt.your voice is quite lovely a bit of lessons you will need .but other than your tiny mess ups your quite good .(:

[Mylastears]

yes i write it. ty for this comment^^

[KayBedaC]

The song is quite okay, and your voice is nice, but I would recommend some singing lessons to get some more control. Also try to soften your " p ", " b " and " th ". Maybe it's an idea to do a strum in the last measure, then the change to chorus gets less sudden. I'm not meaning to be rude, I'm just trying to give you a useful comment. To end with, I like your choice in chords and melody.

Greetings from the Netherlands.

[Mylastears]

thank for the comment i will try it.

[EsmeIsHiding]

You definantly have talent ^^ If you keep going at it, get some great people behind you, some voice tweeks, you could be seriously make it. :)

Just keep at it.

[amutantturtle]

Nice job :D

[yannickesti]

i put the lycris in the description .....

[MsCutiepie14]

Its REALLY good but is there anyway you could add lyrics to the side? Thanks if you can and if you cant its all good

[yannickesti]

haha thank^^

[NYC330]

My favorite part was the lyrics "A girl with glow eyes, by a beautiful brown hair."

I like that. (:

[vikirose95]

thats really good!

[LovelyJess23]

I love it!! [: Keep writing and singing. [:

[albino1blacksheep]

You got five stars annd a favorite from me. I love this song! Great job!

[WesleyMcroberts]

good voice! keep writing music buddy,

[kimdaninja]

wow, no wonder u were able to play it very well. i've only jus started last year so i'm not very good

[Mylastears]

4years