Hermione/Severus/Harry-Rock Star-Part One

Plot: Severus loves Hermione but she's in a relationship with Harry, at the first year when she first goes to Hogwarts and enters the hall he looks at her in amazment. Quarrel notices Snape's amazment but doesn't say anything. After Harry defeats the troll in the girls' bathroom Snape goes to talk to Harry but can't help but looking at Hermione. Harry hears something threw the walls and it's Snape talking to himself about Hermione and Harry, and how he would treat Hermione better than Harry. When the first year is done and they're looking back toward Hogwarts they see Snape. Then once the days past and in the second year when she comes back from being petrified she runs up to Harry and hugs him but Severus sees it and looks away after. Harry sees that he loves Hermione. This is just the first ''episode'' of my Severus/Hermione/Harry series.

Category:

Entertainment

Tags:

• Harry
• Potter

[laurenlovestomfelton]

@whit0utname its sang by miley/hannah i can't mind what its called but i remember it was playiing in my toothbrush when i was little lol

[whit0utname]

whats the name of the song?

[dukedevlinluvah]

You let a big chance to show Sev's love for Hermi slip by skipping through the entire 2nd year.

It's a waste of time in the song; you could have had Snape look at Hermione from different angles in class or something, rather than keeping the tree&slo-mo horse guy. :)

Without the summary at the side I would have trouble discovering what this series is about. ^.^; Sorry love.

But yeah it's only part 1 and there are lots of parts coming up I'm sure. x3;

3*

I'm off to watch part 2

[dukedevlinluvah]

From 1:22 to 1:38 I see a near-still of the Whomping Willow and Hogwarts. That's a long bit of the song going to waste right there. I'm guessing it's supposed to symbolize the summer holidays but 16 seconds is a LONG time in a music video.

1:43-2:11 there's the ghost-rider thing... In slow-mo. I think it doesn't really fit in because I can't discover what it's purpose is there.

Then at the end it's all fine! =D Like... The footage you used.

[dukedevlinluvah]

Ok I said I'd check it out so here I am! Episode 1!

First thing I notice is your plot. x3; It's not a plot, it's a summary of the video. So... either name it 'summary' or leave out a bunch of details. ;D No offence, trying to help. <3

Now the video itself:

The beginning is fine. x3; Maybe you could use like.. an opening theme for your series? It's not necessary but I personally like to be able to tell by the video itself that it's part of the series. (continuing in next comment box)

[siriusblack340]

mossclaw what happened to the one about snapes childhood? i really wanted to c dat one!

[siriusblack340]

ok mossclaw i'm gana give it a try...i hope i like it...lol

[YuNaHime]

Eekk! I liked it~ Can't wait for part two!! I can tell this series is gonna be great! ^~^