Unexpected Love(A Jemi Story) Episode 5:Friends?

Hope you like this episode.Right now I'm working on episode 7.Episode 6 is ready!!!!

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• Jemi
• Love

[7198449]

can you get another picture of dr.lovato he just seems so mad in the whole story

[XoXoMichieXoXo]

Haha

I already finished this story,I can't do anything about it sorry

[chiccybaby13]

omg!awsome eppy!!is there a marathon coming soon?luv it!

[XoXoMichieXoXo]

Thank you!

I already finished writing this series

[pomgirl11]

i luv ur series awesome next eppy plz!!!!!

[XoXoMichieXoXo]

Thanks!

I'm going to upload it now.

[joejonaswantsmesobad]

this is great! heres my critique (only stuff i think needs improvement. everything else was totally fabulous!!!

i think you should add more intimacy.

i also think you should add more detail on how the characters are ffeeling and not what they're doing. try to reveal their deeper feelings ( its hard to do this b.c at some times you can use actions to do this or you can use the setting of a scene or even what the characters say- but esp. when you're describing what they think) .

[DeMi29SeLeNa]

whats wrong with demi? i mean like why is she like.. kinda rude to her dad? why doesnt she like him?

[carlytrotchie]

Are you stalking me lol thats soo funny

[Winter1345]

yea think ur right!!

[joejonaswantsmesobad]

basically what im saying (couldnt write this b.c of character count) is that after watching it again, you did a really great job esp. at the parts aorund 2:30. that was great writing there! anyway dont think of me as some snotty utuber cuz im not. haha i cant even do half the stuff i said. anyway good job on your series so far. i have my own and lets just say i have a lot to learn! lol. anyway great job so far. your left wanting to know more about the characters, though, so. yeah. :D