WIthdraw

First short film. Inspired by the novel The Sound of My Voice by Ron Butlin. An outwardly successful alcoholic is losing control and risking losing his young family. Thanks to Ron Butlin, Boards of Canada and Archive for permission to use their work and inspiration.

Category:

Film & Animation

Tags:

• alcoholism
• boards
• of
• canada
• archive
• car
• drama

[Mathew47]

is this a comedy?

[eavangel]

yes

[xMLGxBXRxPROx]

The music seemed to really overwhelm the dialogue and that really took away from the scenes where there was any. I really like the last song, but I don't know if it really was appropriately placed and synced with the scenes; like it was merely plopped on the last third of the film like for effect. Acting was competent, but I think you did a fine job directing overall.

[eavangel]

Thanks for taking the time to comment. I am working on a new sound version. I intended to not include so much dialogue. kind regards

[lurching]

I'm really glad you consulted me so early in the editing. The result is stunning. Love your touch.

[eavangel]

Merci beaucoup monsieur.

[JeevesReturns]

Well filmed, acting was "eh", and the script was meandering too much to really have a point.

[Elk4758]

Kind of a mess. Didn't seem to really go anywhere.

[coffeefilms]

Beautifully shot, cut and put together, great job!

[nudgy]

Excellent. I really enjoyed this story and how you put it all together. Keep making them and keep posting them...