Your style is whack, you use too many exact syllable rhymes in a short time, unless you break up your flow, maybe invest in a rhythm book, or just save yourself the money look it up online.
Not every single verse has to end in a rhyme, the same time, in my mind, on the grind....get the idea , you need to work on altering your mundane approach to phrasing in order to really find an interesting way to get your message across, right now t sounds like you are rapping out of a Dr. Sussestein book
Is it a real Jew or one of those "Hebros" ?
siksakkishon 3 weeks ago
Wonderful! Especially knowing Liora!!!
TheJtrose 5 months ago
excellent!
thetechgeek1000 6 months ago
I think it sounds excellent. Keep up the good work Rueven. I'm watching you and wish you all the blessings...
planetmuman 1 year ago
Your style is whack, you use too many exact syllable rhymes in a short time, unless you break up your flow, maybe invest in a rhythm book, or just save yourself the money look it up online.
gwaltsix8 2 years ago
Not every single verse has to end in a rhyme, the same time, in my mind, on the grind....get the idea , you need to work on altering your mundane approach to phrasing in order to really find an interesting way to get your message across, right now t sounds like you are rapping out of a Dr. Sussestein book
gwaltsix8 2 years ago
Amazing song! =)
Thank you!!!
shalomsalaampeace13 2 years ago
LOVE IT!!! =)
shalomsalaampeace13 2 years ago
Yo Love it!!!!!!
Willybeen 2 years ago
wow!!! This song is really beautiful and so moving. :-) good job man!!!
piacarlin 2 years ago