Perseverance; Dedicated To My Mother (Unfinished)

this is my newest piece. i could also use help editing it. it is hard to edit something you just wrote by yourself. anyways, tell me what you think. i want input on what is wrong with it. i will put the lyrics up later.

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Entertainment

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• wisdom
• random
• poetry
• performing
• arts
• poem
• untitled
• eboyd
• erik
• boyd
• mom
• mother
• optimistic
• optimism
• dedicate
• dedicated

[Nawledge1]

Tight work, tight work!! GET SIGNED! Hiphop needs this!!

[eboyd32]

lol! i don't know if this will work as a hip hop track, but thanks!

[Doffaldinho]

I never liked poetry before, I checked out your poetry because of your uploading of the Sugarhill Gang. Must say this poem really sticks out to me its fantastic, Well done. 5*

[eboyd32]

well, i'm glad to hear that! thank you very much.

[AbbottSupreme]

ditto TheLastGreatOne!!..A poem has no end, but 2 ones own perception and interpretation..great work eboyd32!!..

[eboyd32]

thank you very much!

[SkateBritain]

I'm the same i watched sugarhill gang and i've just checked out all you stuff you are really good and i reckon i will subscribe and hope to hear some more stuff from you!

[n2cora]

impressive. : )

[chinita41]

tony thank u for commenting :)

[eboyd32]

thank you for the help. i will work on that.