I don't know

here's my first original, i know my singing is *ahemshitahem* but i want your comments on this on how i can improve etc.

lyrics:
Though
Although i only knew you for such a short time.
I just can't seem
To get you out of my mind.
Its really weird
How i can't get my daily system to work
I don't know if its because of you
or is it, just my monday blues

Cause you once told me, you were afraid
Well here i am to make it go away
You once told me, you were petrified
Well here i am to make it alright~

I dont know if its because of you
i could'nt get good sleep at night
I dont know if its because of you
i couldnt get things done alright
There's been something i want to say
but i never got the nerves
I think im falling in love

Just so you know
I stayed up till seven in the morn
Yet another sleepless night
Just to write you this song

Cause you once told me you were afraid
Well here i am to make it go away
You once told me you were petrified
Well here i am to make it alright

I dont know if its because of you
i could'nt get good sleep at night
I dont know if its because of you
i couldnt get things done alright
There's been something i want to say
but i never got the nerves
I think im falling in love

I dont know if its bacause of you
I couldnt get good sleep at night
I dont know, dont know~

I dont know if its because of you
i could'nt get good sleep at night
I dont know if its because of you
i couldnt get things done alright
There's been something i want to say
but i never got the nerves
I think im falling in love

I dont know if its because of you
i could'nt get good sleep at night
I dont know if its because of you
i couldnt get things done alright
There's been something i want to say
but i never got the nerves
I think im falling in love
with you, with you~

Category:

Music

Tags:

• nicholas
• sim
• montfort
• guitar
• original

[Gothic91]

hahah soh! thanks for the guitar ah.

Thanks cheryl , cannot hear meh? loud enough what, its not mmmm hahah

[janasiy]

beautiful lyrics :D

you should sing louder though :D

jyjy!

[kosol224]

nice one mann!!!

[mathead123]

way to go dude

[pandabearzom]

Hello! Leslie D here, the lyrics are beautiful; very meaningful..about the singing, I thought it was alright..mmmmm..maybe try singing with more expression in your voice next time..anyhows, keep it up and continue writing

[Cherylynn94]

i like it

not bad for your first original song

just sing a little louder next time (: