My Sister's Keeper [Ultimate Writer's Contest: Round 1]

Aloha, viewers! Please read!

First of all, thank you thank you thank you!! It means so much to me that you voted! I still can't believe I actually got to the top 15! And seeing the writer's I'm up againt made me nervous. And I read a few of the entries, & man am I going to lose.
They were BEYONG amazing, while this on the other hand did not turn out as good as I wanted it to be :/ But I tried anyway. And as you might notice, at first things were like all romantic, then less than half way through the video, the perverted convos started :P
Well, that's my because at first I wanted it to be romantic & I was trying hard to be as goos as the other writers but then I realized that this contest is about YOUR writing style, not others, so I gave up on the cheesyness & just wrote it the way I always write my stories.
And I'm gonna tell you from now, for the rest of the contest I'm not going to always use Jemi, I'll definitely use Niley & maybe Nelena or Jelena or any of those other couples just to spice things up instead of Jemi Jemi Jemi. No matter how much I love them :P

And yes, I did change a few things around, first of all, in the movie Joe still had cancer, but in here he was cured. It's been two months since the disease had gone, but Demi on the other hand is still going through chemo. I didn't really change the plot, but this is nothing like the acutal scene. The dialog I mean.

Oh & credits to RBDulceRobertaxAvril for the title. Thank you so much :D

Hmm, let's see what did I want to say....
It's seems like I'm done.
So, I really hope you like this, I worked hard on it. Really hard.

Love, Dana

Category:

Entertainment

Tags:

• Jemi
• Joe
• Jonas
• Demi
• Lovato
• soccershannon27
• ultimate
• writer's
• contest

[madii4ever]

Wow.. amazing :) <3

don't worry, u r incredibly good at writing, so u'll get through, & if u dont - though u will :P - it's ok, cause u would still be amazing ;D

loved it, gr8 job, but since i have 2 ask, ya ya i have 2 ruin the compliments - what's with the songs? not the choice, the edit of the sound?! i wanted 2 laugh, but the story itself was too good, i just couldn't :P

[TribeSpirit]

Well, first off, thank you ;)

And second, yeah, they turned out hella weird, they sounded good on SV, I used Pich Shift & it was fine, but then I rendered it, & the voices either went more deep or more high :S

[sj23564]

I'm going to be honest with you. Watch your grammar. Look at how you use the tenses and stuff, cause I definitely saw some present then past in the same line. I can't be harsh cause you're official language isn't English, and you still write a bit better than some of these 'writers' on here. Anyway, it was very good, just try to use my advice if you make it further :)

[TribeSpirit]

Yeah, grammer isn't exactly my strongest point, so you're going to see more mistakes in the future :P

But in my defense, English is acutally my second language, so...yeah.

[renesmevato2]

no it was amazing! i feel in love with this!

[JasmineTilman]

This is amazingg!!

[101Skylight]

I like selena in this she is hallarious!

[Mafalda963]

Omg! This was so beautiful. Completely loved it <3

[crazyylilykinsx]

u just make me cry!

god!

in a good way though,im such a sucker for cheesy-witty story

it too adorable!

[chanellovesing]

that's amazing

[RoDiaz96]

LOVED IT! it was really very VERY sweet!

Peace out ♥!

[TheOutsider1996]

you are amazing! you can be so funny but still make it super romantic and sweet. you are awesome!!

[jobrowhoa]

Amazing :) Gotta love Jemi <3 Let's see some Niley though! Lol. And maybe some Jelena :) But no Nelena! LOL Hope you get far :P

[inlovexforxlife]

ahhh god ur such a great writer >_> screw u :P haha jk illyyy