10 second animation for Smyton4tw.wmv

this is for the ten second animation contest held by Smyton4tw. This probably ist the final copy so tell me what you like or don't like
I used photoshop cs4 and windows movie maker. it was 24fps

Category:

Film & Animation

Tags:

• dbz
• animation
• 10
• seconds
• 24fps
• Smyton4tw
• vegeta
• goku

[aznric3able]

i think it's boring how u have vegetable falling down flat..when the camera angle is on side view. after he fell u should have transition it to a different clip that is front view with rocks crumbled and dashing toward the camera.

[WorldsOfPivot]

@aznric3able you make it first... iwanna see that... then i will do it..lol

[smyton4tw]

I'm glad to see a piece that attempts movement and is longer than 5 seconds. I can tell you tried. Work on detail more, especially since this is HD. With art, it looked exptrememly rushed, lines intersecting with other lines as well as sloppy lines. The coloring on Vegeta's shining hair was too much, it looked lazy. Also too many straight lines (like Vegeta's eyes at :11) .

(continued)

[WorldsOfPivot]

@smyton4tw thanks for critiquing, its really motivating me. if you dont like it a lot; i will fix it up and try to add more movement and less sloppy lines. thanks for being honest

[m8jin12]

that goku punch around the end was really good

[smyton4tw]

(Continued)

The animation was good in the beginning, I'd say just add more In between frames. For example, after Goku tosses Vegeta, he goes from a weird croaked position to standing straight. The brings me to my next point, proportion and perspective. I noticed many people have trouble with profile prospective or camera panned down or up. Work on that. Most of your Goku frames where facing directly at the camera. Proportion as everyone already said so I wont repeat. Keep it up though! Good work

[WorldsOfPivot]

@HimuraAnimator do you mean the characters are too small? thanks for critiquing, your helping alot

[HimuraAnimator]

@WorldsOfPivot

The end was decent, but the beggining had terrible proportions no offence. Even look at your Roxas i Photoshop CS4 compared to this

[WorldsOfPivot]

@HimuraAnimator what do you mean.. i have improved.

[HimuraAnimator]

you were doing so much better than this D: