Blackjack befriends H8_Seed - Discord's Story

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This is my first real rap compared to the song I tried making from scratch in the previous video. PLEASE tell me what you think. I'll be honest, I dealt with the hand I was given: Turtle Beach headset and Audacity, anypony?

Musical credit goes to H8_Seed at http://www.youtube.com/user/TheUlasht
Lyrics and the art is by me. (No, I have no relation to Fallout: Equestria's Blackjack, despite coincidences. I made Zachary "Blackjack" Atticus before I knew of F:E.)

Original Song (Neverending Strife): http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0eOMuLsuwQk

My Tumblr: http://inquire-blackjack.tumblr.com/

LYRICS:
A thousand years
left in the cold.
Upon your ears,
his story unfolds.

Discord,
the chaos lord.
Frozen in stone,
was his only home.
Luna and Ce-lest-i-a,
now on to the rest a-ya.

His claws have sharpened over time.
He'll cut you right down in your prime.
You'll writhe in his crazy laugh
as he sits writing your epitaph.

Look into his eyes,
See everything flies.
Be that one sting you will despise.

Speak white lies,
Laughter dies,
Cruelty is now on the rise.

Loyalty cries,
Greed buys.

Need allies?
Im-pro-vise.

In your skies,
take his guise.

This implies,
a demise.

I advise,
compromise.

Magic has lost its full light
and utterly cost the whole fight.
Discord is cackling on his throne,
Your ears ring as you chill to the bone.

Your boss
Chaos
Your cross
Chaos
Coin toss
Chaos
Emboss
Chaos

Want more?
Implore!
Can't score?
Ignore!
Your floor?
No more!

Tell me if you want his reign,
It'll befall thee a chocolate stain.
A leg up on him is what you lack,
You'll just fall flat on your back.

He's Discord.
Feel floored?

Don't deny he's got great taste,
Lay down order to fated waste.
Your savior will be some princess?
Please tell me that you jest.

Discord,
the chaos lord.
Upon his throne,
is now his home.
Luna and Ce-lest-i-a.
He's gonna wait for the rest a-ya.

Don't leave him waiting.

Enjoy his own affinity
as it's now known as reality.
Harmony will be a saving grace,
but now it's just a wild goose chase.

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• Discord
• H8_Seed
• befriends
• Zachary
• Blackjack
• Atticus
• psychologist
• brony
• pegasister
• unicorn
• story
• neverending
• strife
• My
• Little
• Pony:
• Friendship
• is
• Magic
• mlp
• fim

[MasterOfRegret]

Your voice does not suit the song. Raps should be obnoxious and in your face. You're talking to soft for this. Back up and give a small shout into your Turtles, bro. Maybe some autotune would be in order as well. Just a little. Then again, maybe not.

I think you should have less two word lines as well. But this has good potential.

Turtle beaches + rap = my next week. Aw..... Got a rap about Derpy in the works.

[UltimaM2]

@MasterOfRegret Very cool and thanks for the tips! :) It was pretty experimental for a better portion of this from formatting in lyrics to match the song and making sure my voice wasn't too much louder than the music. I honestly went back and forth on the parts where I get to the two word sections as I didn't want to have too much of a gap between stanzas.