i love the intro... what a tune lol i thought it was very professional up untill the picture of jon and rachel but who am i to critisize- love the poem and the voiceover of a very mellow chilaxed aaron xxx
Was very impressed! Thought it was done very professionally and to a very high standard.
One area for improvement, would be to perhaps have a soundtrack playing in the background, whilst the poems are being read; in order to keep the viewers attention.
Very impressive work though, from two budding writing i will certainly look out for in the near future.
hahahahahahaaaaaaaaaaaaaa
me, mason and laurie think this is the funniest thing we have EVER seen.....
PAIN!
yes the day IS too dark.....PAIN!
LETS GET A BIGGER SUN!
laurie is a poet, he thinks that this discourse lacks integrity and intellect. The end.
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hardcoreharcourt 2 years ago
i love the intro... what a tune lol i thought it was very professional up untill the picture of jon and rachel but who am i to critisize- love the poem and the voiceover of a very mellow chilaxed aaron xxx
themike179 4 years ago
Was very impressed! Thought it was done very professionally and to a very high standard.
One area for improvement, would be to perhaps have a soundtrack playing in the background, whilst the poems are being read; in order to keep the viewers attention.
Very impressive work though, from two budding writing i will certainly look out for in the near future.
lazmartin 4 years ago
even if this poem used correct english, it would still be awful. and you'd still be a twat.
whatanamusingname 4 years ago