:30 Second Commercial For My class

the video was more drawn out and elaborate. but i had to shed at least half a minute off because it had to be 30 seconds. smdh. im gumby! i wrote, planned, directed, and edited the shit. thanks

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[defenderDX9er]

...not the left, it's confusing to the eye if you understand what im saying. ask your film teacher or w/e his title is "why is it important to not 'cross the line' in film". 5. at :14 im not really understanding the cross fade transition. not necessary. and in general, id advertise the protein bar soonder in the video as it feels kinda rushed towards the end. dont take these comments the wrong way, just givin you some good feedback.

[Pedaissance]

@defenderDX9er again, i had to trim it down a lot so the ad was there for barely 2 seconds

[Pedaissance]

@defenderDX9er did u not get what i said? i said there was a part after it that i had to take out and never remembered about leaving the transition for the previous clip in there. it didnt seem like a problem anyway, looking back on it

[defenderDX9er]

Alright ped, since u took the time to post this if you dont mind im going to take the time to critique it. I'm taken lots of film classes and it's the field I want to get into. 1. the first shot looks bad because the person talking is out of focus and the BG is in focus. 2. there is no need for a fade to black transition when cutting to the 2nd shot. 3. too much head room at :05 4. when you fall over the chair the next shot should be of you rolling over to the right of the screen, not the left

[Pedaissance]

@defenderDX9er lol its not meant to be excessively articulate. and a part was taken out and the transition was left in unknowingly. thats not really considered an "error" though, it makes sense being in there and dont look at me i wasnt filming, i was the talent. lol.

[RipperEagle96]

Haha! Hey man I'm sorry!