Bullet Point

This was my third year and final film at Uni. It took me ages.



----------------------

Could definitely do with a re-edit

Category:

Film & Animation

Tags:

• short
• film
• arthouse
• experimental
• green
• screen
• backwards
• Family
• Ties
• jam
• roly
• poly
• michelle
• ryan
• children
• of
• men
• blood
• on
• photoshopt
• final
• cut
• pro
• trinity
• college
• carmarthen
• shithole
• wales
• athiest
• jesus
• god
• evolution
• mixed
• fruit
• obama
• mccain
• election
• microsoft
• my
• this
• is
• taking
• ages

[ro53ben]

Well made video, but I'll save the compliments for your mates and give you other feedback. :O)

Firstly, I didn't really understand the story. It got my attention though. Excessive use of reverse footage as well, if you wanted to do all that you could maybe have speeded it up and warped the audio.

Main negative was the 999 phone call...poor audio. Didn't at all sound like a phone call and the voice acting was poor.

I liked the lead actress on screen though, good casting, she's cute.

[urbanspaceman1]

Thanks for your comments; constructive criticism is always appreciated.

[RasGold]

Nice! I've actually been to that party.

[louisefae]

i would like to add my acting has improved since those days! lol! but i am glad i entertained you enough to watch it through to the end! lol!

[lb1982]

girl was hot but a shit actress. guy was evil looking (think he should've payed patrick bateman lol....or, christian bale) and an ok actor. i got bored, not gonna lie but the girl kept me watchin just for her looks lol...that says more about me than the clip..yikes!

[BornToDieProductions]

My thoughts;

The audio needed sorting out big time...the voice of the police woman at the start should have been edited to sound like she was on the phone. Infact, both could have been...

Loved the tracking shots down the corridor 3mins or so in...looked quite professional.

Guy with gun, if he's careful enough to wear gloves (as to not leave fingerprints), why not cover his face too?

Dragged on too much...

[kingstomb]

Ha, you do indeed!

[dearcharles3]

i sound so horrible

[babewivbrains24]

Wasn't bad. Like the comment earlier, got my attention but didn't really get it. I liked the lighting in the corridor bit though. not bad at all.

[louisefae]

thankyou for the compliment! :) yeah the video was well made, although as ian admits it could do with a re - edit! I have changed my surname now, to hawthorne, so should have some other stuff on here soon, watch this space.....x