This song would have been great shortened and not so jumbled, with so many lines. It has a very 80's feel..People make the mistake of writing songs in the wrong era. Write today's sounds or they will never get played. Sad but true.
Great song, flowing, poetic lyrics, and a nice melody. Shame on these critics for their comments on the length and such. There are so many great songs out there, in varying lengths and styles. What potential hit-writers need is direction on the creative process, not to be told to keep in short. There is such a thing as a radio edit version of a song. So make it long and then make a shorter version for radio.
It's a good thing we have the critique boutique to tell artists how to make a song easier to digest by taking out the "personal nuances" and keeping it nice and short. Otherwise a listener might have to actually invest some time into learning to appreciate and understand a song. And we all know that these days the musical "journey" takes about 3mins 45seconds and always has a catchy hook.
Yeah I didn't connect with the song but put the word sin in a song also turns me off as it starts to sound preachy but it was a lovely melody and he had a Simon and Garfunkel sound!
how can I get your book. I have recently come from africa and I am looking to share my music in america but i have no money. let me know where i can get your book
@deyellahRhose
just what i thought too. i was wondering why they failed to mention that the chorus didn't really stand out from the verse.
bjarnyg 11 months ago
This song does not define the chorus enough and yes it is far to long, to much lyrics not enough repetition but the melody is nice.
deyellahRhose 1 year ago
searxh for it on the thing your using!!! (a computer)
deftonesfan192 3 years ago
This song would have been great shortened and not so jumbled, with so many lines. It has a very 80's feel..People make the mistake of writing songs in the wrong era. Write today's sounds or they will never get played. Sad but true.
ang9967 3 years ago
Great song, flowing, poetic lyrics, and a nice melody. Shame on these critics for their comments on the length and such. There are so many great songs out there, in varying lengths and styles. What potential hit-writers need is direction on the creative process, not to be told to keep in short. There is such a thing as a radio edit version of a song. So make it long and then make a shorter version for radio.
Stoovey24 3 years ago
It's a good thing we have the critique boutique to tell artists how to make a song easier to digest by taking out the "personal nuances" and keeping it nice and short. Otherwise a listener might have to actually invest some time into learning to appreciate and understand a song. And we all know that these days the musical "journey" takes about 3mins 45seconds and always has a catchy hook.
static7574 3 years ago 2
I actually like the time it took to build to the chorus. I thought it was a surprising place to spring it on us.
dude111111111110 3 years ago
Yeah I didn't connect with the song but put the word sin in a song also turns me off as it starts to sound preachy but it was a lovely melody and he had a Simon and Garfunkel sound!
thedirtydeltas 4 years ago
how can I get your book. I have recently come from africa and I am looking to share my music in america but i have no money. let me know where i can get your book
fbillionaire 4 years ago