I Need Your Help!!!

I am writing a song. it started with a beat and then I got my keys out and started building from there. i feel like its writing itself. i feel like theres something here but i can't hear what its saying.
any help would be appreciated. do you hear a story in it. i have one in mind but i want to see if ya'll get the same concept.

Category:

Music

Tags:

• hip-hop
• songwriting
• help
• beats
• loops
• strings
• unsigned
• r&b
• myranda

[margodropshercargo]

I feel like this song is about a journey. In the beginning, it is full of fear, but then you become bolder and stronger and more assured of yourself, walking in victory, with your head high. Great job!

[peterrabbit31]

hey there,

thanks for this comment. I agree, i feel it's a journey. i like how you mentioned fear. a journey and struggle of fear, moving forward. Initially what came to mind when i wrote the different music parts was Jennifer Hudson's mom and brother tragically being killed. The beat is representation of hip-hop, i can see the high loop being fear, the picked strings being the struggle, the organ representing solace from the tragedy of death.

man i'm deep...lol. kidding

[sixxmoongirl]

"I know it´s hard, i know it´s tough, but there´s a price we must pay off, sometimes you´re down, sometimes you´re up, but it´s the road that lead you up, i know the fight as right as you, but there´s one thing, you must go on...a new beginning is comming soon, a brand new life only for you, this is your time, this is your turn to try it hard and live it all, maybe you´re scared for the unknown, but trust me you´ll see the light" this came up to me, cheers! Dianna.

[peterrabbit31]

hey dianna,

you got some sick rhymes there. that's awesome. i might just enlist your help when i start writing the verses for this.

[1cruisedirector]

I see the fight and struggle of our heaviest weight and coming to terms of how we got there and how to get out.The march of goal weight and the battle within.Diana

[peterrabbit31]

hey diana, thanks for this. i think you're feeling what it's saying. what's awesome is without words there's still a story being told and people are feeling it. that's what a song should be.

[xx0s0xx]

A Load Of Chips and Burgers Marching Playing Drums Holding Up Banners Saying Save Our Lives Dont Eat Us. and the some big person comes along and picks up a burger and takes a bite and puts some tomato ketchup on it so it looks lyk blud and the burger is lyk screaming but ovbiously the human cant hear it and the other chips and burgers are just starring in amazment.

Lol Totally Random

[SarahWillBeSkinny]

It's prolly too late to comment on this video cuz the song is prolly already made! LOL But to me, I can see an inner struggle... Fighting against old ways, and how I've lived my life up until this point... fighting against anything trying to bring me down. I see myself in a battle... Marching proudly at my acheivements to be a better me.

[fatgirlslimin08]

it sounds like chocolate chip cookies marching to me :)

[w8loss4me]

reminds me of the journey that I'm on...I visualize myself walking down this road into the unknown. I have expectations and worries, and yet I'm compelled to keep moving forward.

[shrinkingJanuary]

a journey to break through the negative. Its up beat so it reminds me of all the hateful people trying to bring one down, but you get through it and break out of the negative norms of today. That's my thought

[YogiUToo]

How about the desire to die to self, and become new again...maybe an act or having the power of making one's own choices and decisions, even though others are skeptical of those decisions. Stepping out of yourself, to become who you really are? I don't know, that's what I hear though....very, very nice! You've really got something there!

[Fabydee]

Made me think of a quest or search & one that has a deadline, there is a sort of frantic need to attain or reach the answers before it's too late! very interesting question though I think it made me go to a place within myself I don't go to often enough... Fab

[imaswtgrl]

nice beat, looking forward to the lyrics you decide to use. Sorry, this is not my specialty at all!!!!!!!!!! I love listening to music, my brain doesn't make it up!

[Opendoors08]

definately sounds like a journey...and hey we need a theme song for our meet and greet in S.C. :) Amy

[w00dw0rm]

I think it should be about your life :)