Stoned (Original Song)

Many weeks have gone by
But still thoughts of you
Linger and dance through my mind
Your spirit of stars explode in the depths of your eyes
I cant escape you Ive tried to forsake you
And leave your brief memory behind
But I feel youre the only, one for to hold me, and the only love I will find

I don't know your name
Cant remember your voice
But I cant stop thinking of you
Your smoked ghostly soul shined like the morning suns dew
But really whats love, is it free like a dove
Or is it just an illusion of the mind
Will this feeling pass or just get trapped, underneath the sands of time

Ive seen the vast sky
And Ive felt the soft air
But none can compare to you
Your crooked sweet heart rippled the pain Ive been through
But am I deceived, will I be relieved
By the mountains of smoke round my head
Is life without love, a curse from above, yet still better than being dead

I cant get a grip
And my hickory eyes
Are stoned by the sad pulse of this world
The rude rhythmic hammering pain of one simple girl
What does it all mean, the urge to just scream
Until I swiftly disappear
The worlds just a speck, nothing to respect, but Ill never get out of here

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• Stoned
• Original
• Song
• Love
• Pain
• Loneliness
• Jack
• Kerouac
• Poetry
• Poem
• Folk
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• Mic

[BaseballsBest343]

Hey, this song sucks and soo do all your songs!

[Nature89]

Sorry its not the Jonas Brothers.

[TheBrooklynRadio]

Hey friend, nicely written. I enjoyed that.

Just one suggestion, it would be nice if you added a bridge or small instrumental part, like maybe after the 2nd verse, just something to switch up the melody. I say this only because I find a constant melody tends to become a bit repetitive. Therefore adding a bridge or a small instrumental segment can help keep the song flowing without becoming to predictable.

Regardless, I thought it was good song, keep it up.

Peace

BkRadio

[Nature89]

Thanks, glad you liked it. I normally write all the verses and go back and write a bridge in, but I just couldn't think of one for this song. I will have to though. Thanks again.

[Metallica72388]

sounds like dylan!

[Metallica72388]

not bad sounds like a bob dillon song

[Nature89]

@christy7337 Thanks. I really like your cover of "Give my Love to Rose."

[christy7337]

@Nature89 good lad

[geeyouknit345]

very dylan-ish i like it

[Jeff1Empire]

how did u get ur mic to record with awesome quality. i just bought my C01u mic today and its not working can u please help me