Pure Talent (Nas - I Can)

my rhymes on Nas' "I Can" instrumental

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Music

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• rap
• nas
• i
• can
• jmei
• pure
• talent

[SuperPekka]

I can't find your reply to my original comment in here (got a notification about it in my email), but here's my reply anyway:

All my critisism was complteletely valid, regarding this specific song. I'm not familiar with your other songs so I can't talk about them, but this track was just weak as far as lyricism goes. I listened to it again just now, and well.. You just didn't say a damn thing. Your lyrics were forgettable and generic. Hustling hustling guns hustling etc... Fuck that shit.

[j2thamei]

@SuperPekka lmao ok. Sounds good homie. I'll take your word for it, since it IS my song and everything...

[SuperPekka]

@j2thamei It's critisism man, you should get used to it if you're planning on releasing stuff on youtube. Nothing personal, I just figured you'd like to know what other people think -- good or bad -- since you DID upload it to a site that has a comments section and everything.

[j2thamei]

@SuperPekka there's a difference between critical feedback and just being negatively critical, my friend. You are providing the latter. I appreciate your honesty, however, this discussion could've been avoided had you simply given me constructive criticism rather than acting like an all-knowing Hip Hop head and disrespecting my work. 

[lEastTube]

Missed something. Can you Freestyle at all? Reply if you can :). Peace.

[j2thamei]

i do when i can...i'm not the greatest but i've been gettin in a lotta ciphers and i've battled a couple times

[who8allthegabagoo]

your asian .. somebody had to say it

[tda33]

I like it hot

[Afronation1990]

u snapped bro

[ThePyroPsychos]

CONT:

Besides those two minor flaws my friend, I truly believe you have a potential to be great. You got a subtle, but strong, deep tone of voice intertwined with a smooth flow and an exceptional delivery. As i said before, im not trying to judge or critique you in any way, but to give you tips and help you be the best emcee you can be. I would not spend so much time on a single comment unless i truly believe someone deserves it.

[ThePyroPsychos]

Hey i just discovered your shit and i gotta say your pretty ill, but there are some things you should consider improving. Please don't take this the wrong way but more as constructive criticism. For the negatives I would say you need to touch on broader subjects and topics with deeper meanings, although i can tell your more of a commercial hip hop fan (i may be wrong) meaning Nas, JayZ, etc., east coast stuff. Second of all, I think you should broaden your lyrical content/widen your word choice

[SuperPekka]

@j2thamei I gave you a starting point: Change your subject matter. Even gave you some references on what I consider real/good rap (although my opinion is obviously not the universally accepted standard).

Once you show that you have the ability to write lyrics on something more important I'm willing to spend time giving you constructive critisism on the more technical things about your delivery/flow.

My intention was not to insult, however, so sorry if I did.

[BLnboy51]

ICH FICKE DEINE MUTTER DU HURENSOHN

[theindie27]

gangster wnnabe