Naive (rewritten from 2008) Original - Danielle Edenfield

LYRICS

I see her, walking that road again.
But she won't see,
it's just another dead end.
And she won't see,
it's not something she can unbend.

She pins up her hair,
to catch his eye but he's unaware.
She does it all for him,
she'd go as far as live in sin.
Girl, don't settle for less,
don't keep your heart so suppressed.

*So girl, you know what's best for you,
*whoa, oh, oh...
*Girl, nothing left to pursue,
*whoa, oh, oh... just say it's through.
*And walk out that door. There's so much in this world, left to explore.

She turns on her night light, maybe she'll sleep tonight.
'Cause he won't be,
beside her as she dreams.
And he won't be,
there to hold her if she screams.

*CHORUS*

So girl, take my advice,
i've been down that road once or twice.
And it's just another dead end.
It's just another kink and bend.
It's just another mistake.
Not something you want to partake.

*So girl, you know what's best for you,
*whoa, oh, oh...
*Girl, nothing left to pursue,
*whoa, oh, oh... just say it's through.
*And walk out that door.
*Girl, just walk on out that door.
*I can't take this anymore.

Copyright ©2008/2011 Danielle Edenfield

www.myspace.com/danielleedenfield (Music)

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• Edenfield
• Dandy087
• Acoustic
• Guitar
• Original
• Song
• Naive
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[danbergam]

*he compares it to the 1st version*

Aww, your vocal lines! And how you sing them, with so much feeling!

You've always been great at singing, but it's clear how you've been able to develop, respect to the first version, and add more and more expressivity to it! :-)

I like this different structure, how the chorus is placed not before the second verse and how it changes in the end: definitely, songs also are about structuring parts and letting'em be more effective!

:-)

[Dandy087]

@danbergam Thank you for noticing the differences :) that's EXACTLY what I did ha ha. I felt that I sang the chorus one too many times the first time, and that going two verses before it was more settling. That, and of course, the development of my voice. I wasn't impressed with my older version :P I can be my own biggest critic sometimes. Thank you for watching Dan! Have a good day.

[ZeabiGames]

beep boop

[jsr9422]

impressive

[danbergam]

@Dandy087

All of what you wrote... and not only! Now the audio quality is way improved and your performance can be better appreciated in all of its nuances! :-D

Oh, I think that for an artist being critic towards oneself is important: it's the (very needed) premise for to improve! ;-)

Thank you for being there doing your own thing and letting us witness the process, Danielle... it's precious, because it's stuff from soul to soul! :-)

Have a great day in return! ^_^

[NOWICALLEDMYSELF]

sounds good",)