Poverty in Israel FIRST DRAFT

Karen and Nikki. Our video is about poverty that is happening in Israel. It talks about what they go through, we are trying to make a difference and spread the awareness.

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• 2minutes2011

[spmath789]

Nice work! The music, the informations and the pictures were great! It's very organized. My only suggestion for you is to add your voices and your expert and maybe extend the video a bit more so it would be 2 minutes or more. Overall the video is great!

-Shenna 814

[spmath789]

Good job! I like how the pictures match with the sayings. You should add some narrative on the info u guys had. also, add pictures or a video on what u did to make a difference and ur interviewer. Overall it was good.

-Demvry P. 8-17

[spmath789]

Good job girls. I like that you guys chose many visuals that matched your topic. I also like that your music went well with your video. One suggestion that I would like to make was to add some narrative to your video. I would also like to suggest to add some more content or spread the video out a little longer because it didn't reach 2 minutes.

-Kim8-14

[spmath789]

Great Job girls! I really liked your video and your difference.Your music choice was very effective and your images as well.A few things I would point out to improve on your good copy is to make sure you can read the text on the images,some of them are hard to read,try using different colors so you can see it on your images.Lastly check through your texts for grammar mistakes,some of them didn't make much sense.Overall great job girls!

-krizna 8-73

[spmath789]

Great video! I like the music you chose, it matched the purpose of your video. One suggestion is to talk in your video so we don't have to read everything. Another suggestion is to find an expert and put what you did to make a difference with proof. Also at 0:27, 0:41, and 0:48, your font is difficult to read because of the colour. You should change it so it stands out. Other than that keep up the good work!

-Kristel 8-16

[spmath789]

Nice job! The first thing that I saw though, was that your video was not in the 2 minute span. I liked the pictures you chose, because it speaks to the topic, and explains a lot without using words. I also highly recommend that you girls should change the color of the font at times, because it blends into the pictures and we aren't able to read it. The music was good, but could have been better. You should have also shown how YOU made a difference, and add more pictures to satisfy others.

[spmath789]

Good Job! You had good pictures and descriptions that went with each picture. I think you should change the font color because it was kind of hard to see at some parts. You should make the video at least 2 minutes. You could do that by adding your expert interview or add more pictures. You put how we can make a difference, but you should also put what you did to make a difference. -HazelTurdanes873

[spmath789]

Good Job girls! I liked how you guys talked about why we should care about poverty in Israel and I liked the pictures you used to show poverty in Israel. I also liked how you guys helped and showed how people can help Israel. My advice though, is that next time you girls should change the font colour of some of the texts in the video because some of the texts are kind of hard to see.

~Paulo814

[3456man]

Good job! The music was well used and matched the subject completly. You had lots of pictures that matched the topic. One thing I noticed was that sometimes you couldn`t read the text because of the picture behind it. I noticed you didn`t reach 2 minutes so I suggest putting more pictures near the end where you gave ways people could help. There were only a few pictures there.

-Nils 8-16 :)

[spmath789]

the contents on why we should care about this topic is there. Showed examples on what we can do to help. Have pictures representing the topic and choice of music at the background.Suggestions to this video is to make the text clearer or move the text around because some of the text can't be seen in some of the pictures. Put the audio or whatever you guys used to interview your expert. At some point, have your voice in the video.The music fits the video but there's no climax to it. Karen Sule 817