OK...so I wrote this song...

Please be nice to me!!! I know I sound really nasally, poor breath support, yadda yadda yadda...I just want to know if its terrible. Not my singing, I know it needs work, its more for my lyrics. So if this one's no good, I'll pitch it and work more on my others. Thanks guys! I get so nervous! I guess I don't wanna look like a doofus in front of you guys, but you'd think I'd be over that by now with all the 2 and 3 in the morning vlogs I've posted! : )

Lyrics:
I still catch my breath
everytime I hear your name
Then the conversation changes
and the topics race but my heart stays alone

I'll be in a crowded room
and I'll think I hear your voice
I'm searching frantic throught the faces
hoping not to place you there across the room

It'll never be the same
It could never be the same
I'm not gonna fight this feeling that I'm having
It'll only come back anyway

Wishing I could feel your touch
Then remembering the pain it brings
Those memories I can't escape them
Hoping to replace them but its all in vain.

How can I still feel this way?
I thought the faithful hands of time
Would tick at the familiar prick
That feeling makes me sick that it was a lie

How was I to ever know?
That everytime I'd close my eyes
I'd see your face in every sleep
That you would haunt my dreams, I'd get no rest at night.

Why can't I let this go?
I hate this faithful heart of mine
As much as I regret I made them
Promises I gave you keep my heart bound tight.

Category:

Music

Tags:

• song
• writing
• singing
• vlog
• practice

[2MuChDeAn]

that so did NOT suck :)

[KimberlyAnne618]

Thak You! now i just have to finish it! : )

[inspinsu]

grrrrr.... it wouldn't let me post last comment got stuck or something. I just wanted to say that this is the second time I have listened to this. I think you should continue to write, sing and share your joy. I can tell that writing is a passion for you. I also write songs and your song hits home. You're voice is beautiful. And when I said it sounded a bit country....I was thinking of Underwood singing it. Could you imagine that...her singing a song you wrote!!!! :)

[KimberlyAnne618]

they were having a problem with the comments yesterday. drove me crazy as well.

that would be amazing! i would just die! i love Carrie Underwood! : )

[inspinsu]

I just have to say.....that this is my second time listening to this and it is just beautiful. It hits home...and I think you should continue to write...sing and share your joy.

[KimberlyAnne618]

thank you! i think i will. i've enjoyed it so far. : )

[grundge69]

Hey Kim, rerecord this without the cat in the background. I want to tinker around with some music to it.

[KimberlyAnne618]

haha it might be fun to see you try though! hey you can use whatever you want of mine. i think i'd feel really flattered actually. at least that's what they say about imitation! : )

[KimberlyAnne618]

haha not sure about fame and fortune, but i do enjoy it. i think i'll keep working on it and maybe people other than me will really like it too! i'm so glad you liked it! : )

[thepappytube]

Ah, I'm glad you like them :)

I was going to ask if I could use your lyrics to sing a 'cover' of this song, but I don't think my deep voice would be able to reach the high notes :P