Silver lines and sunshine (orginal composistion)

I wrote this particular song back in 2009 as part of my music GCSE but the voice was breaking at the time so I never really did much with this song. I random recovered the lyrics last week in my memory box and despite it being super cliché as the lyrics are I felt it determined to relearn and adapt it into a pop number, Tell me what you think in the comments, constructive critisim is always welcome!

Lyrics:
Alarm goes but your crying for the rest
Your lovers abuse you, accuse you, reuse you to go and drop you on your head
Your life sucks, ha-ha, well you say that it's unfair
Your life is just trouble that doubles every time you sit on life's chair
But every day is the same as before
Because you're still here waiting for that something more

Every cloud has silver linings you're just waiting for that shine
But I know that you'll find it in time (keep trying)
Even though the sun is shining you're still finding life alone
Its ok, while I stay I'll play piano
I'll play on my piano, keep an eye on those clouds

Trying to think of the words to make you smile again
But it's really hard to put the who, to what, to why, to when
Try to convince you everything will be just fine
Your kiss, your golden smile reminds me off sunshine
But every day is the same as before
Because you're still here waiting for that something more

Every cloud has silver linings you're just waiting for that shine
But I know that you'll find it in time (keep trying)
Even though the sun is shining you're still finding life alone
Its ok, while I stay I'll play piano
I'll play on my piano, keep an eye on those clouds

But every day that I'm away from you get me down, wearing a frown
But then your face lights up the place and all the clouds are gone
And all that's left, silver lines and sunshine

Silver lines and sunshine
Believing that it is true
Silver lines and sunshine
All because I love you

Every cloud has silver linings you're just waiting for that shine
But I know that you'll find it in time (keep trying)
Even though the sun is shining you're still finding life alone
Its ok, while I stay I'll play piano
I'll play on my piano; keep an eye on those clouds...

Category:

Music

Tags:

• sunshine
• Silver
• and
• piano
• Piano
• ray
• charles
• mika
• love
• gental
• keyboard
• life
• sucks
• sun
• whether

[TheMrCree]

I do love your work as you know :) but i think you need to work at what key you sing at as in some places it does sound a bit flat :)

[strangestuffstudios]

@TheMrCree Yh i know, I should have spent more time on this but oh well, I wrote this back when I was mr squeeky. Ah well, gott move on and get our video up ;)

[YaziOlivia]

No matter how many times I watch this, I still love it just as much as I did the first time. It's incredible. Found myself singing it round the house the other day :'] x

[SwingStu]

professional, relevant and very well written. A stellar performance, hope you make it big someday.

Probably your best work yet, which is saying something. :)

[TheAirsoftGamer13]

your rly good! :D