Liquid Lunch - Auto Tune (rough draft)

it is a song I wrote and if you are reading this, maybe you are watching it lol

counting new madnesses to fall asleep
and falling so much further than I could ever want

our tongues met time and time again
until time and place did slip away

do you ever let your heart wander
through the shrouded hallways of your mind?
do you ever keep your heart on a leash
tied to a pole while you're asleep?

weirdo witless talk
and high caffeinated pretty girl stalk
she laughs though she doesn't understand
I laugh though I don't understand

ooooohhhh aaahh ooohhh

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• johannes
• sebastian
• bach
• and
• stephen
• malkmus
• probably
• hung
• out

[OlSpazzy]

This is your best work yet.

Suggestions:

- At 1:08, go for a lower vocal note as a contrast to the high note which was already used at 1:00

- At 2:35, go into a legit breakdown, change the strumming pattern and make it really mellow for a bit

- Maybe some falsetto for the ooohs and aaaahs

[kafkadoodle]

I was not expecting those suggestions -- I thought you'd might want to change the breakdown that comes before the breakdown you want to insert. I'm not opposed to any of your suggestions here. As for the falsetto stuff, jim's vocals will add a high part. do I just sound bad in that range or what? too grunge? laying it on too thick? WHAT DO YOU WANT FROM ME TRAVIS

[kafkadoodle]

thank you, sir or madam :)

[kafkadoodle]

man, yeah, I keep seeing/hearing where you and travis would be making all these new songs so much better/complete. if we don't road trip, I could bring the electric, there's the keyboard amp that can plug in multiple instruments, and hopefully we'll have access to some keyboard, or I could try to bring it. miss you man!!!

[OlSpazzy]

lol it sounds decent as is, it could just be spiced up a bit is all.

[openingwonder]

This is great man. Super-earnest vocals, unfettered lyrics, and non-offensive guitar skills combine to form an indie rock gem.

[MeHateNames]

Damn Dude - GREAT JOB!

I'm itching to play along side you as soon as you get back!!!!!!