Speaking from what I see (rather than my own experience in comedy, as I have none), as a sub-noob in Comedy....
You seem to have a little better stage presence than in the other videos. Though there were quite bit of filler words right at the beginning (uhh, umm, etc).
The joke about the puppy was a tad predictable (for me), so maybe if you changed the punchline or gave it a little bit more surprise that might give it some "punch". I don't know....just throwing some ideas out there.
Speaking from what I see (rather than my own experience in comedy, as I have none), as a sub-noob in Comedy....
You seem to have a little better stage presence than in the other videos. Though there were quite bit of filler words right at the beginning (uhh, umm, etc).
The joke about the puppy was a tad predictable (for me), so maybe if you changed the punchline or gave it a little bit more surprise that might give it some "punch". I don't know....just throwing some ideas out there.
Argh....could you delete one of the extra comments please? I accidently doubled posted LOL.
Please delete this one too.
Lava589 4 years ago
Speaking from what I see (rather than my own experience in comedy, as I have none), as a sub-noob in Comedy....
You seem to have a little better stage presence than in the other videos. Though there were quite bit of filler words right at the beginning (uhh, umm, etc).
The joke about the puppy was a tad predictable (for me), so maybe if you changed the punchline or gave it a little bit more surprise that might give it some "punch". I don't know....just throwing some ideas out there.
LAVA89
Lava589 4 years ago
Speaking from what I see (rather than my own experience in comedy, as I have none), as a sub-noob in Comedy....
You seem to have a little better stage presence than in the other videos. Though there were quite bit of filler words right at the beginning (uhh, umm, etc).
The joke about the puppy was a tad predictable (for me), so maybe if you changed the punchline or gave it a little bit more surprise that might give it some "punch". I don't know....just throwing some ideas out there.
LAVA89
Lava589 4 years ago