H8TAZ (fast rap, single verse by L Fiers)

Check out my myspace: www.myspace.com/lfiers. A little verse i wrote today. Sorry about the quality, i hadnt rehearsed it so i was reading off the page while at the same time trynna hold the camera phone up. Didnt help that i also slammed down some Johnny Walker compliments of my bro! Anyway, slightly rough, i messed up a little bit near the end but fuck it. Hope u like. Oh yeah. Here are the lyrics:
It's the L Fiers & im back,
& i wanna bring a pretty cool rap,
& im off the charts honestly try to be findin' me up in a map, motha fuckers wanna come here to diss & i really dont know why they wanna do that,
but im rippin' it up & i still be bringin' it quick so fuck it i be here to attack,
the lyrical hoop it be true i be slammin' em in & im dunken' em in like im Michael Jordan,
back in the day like im lyrically ballin',
i be the one to get em all in im mawlin' em all & there fallin',
like a soldier that got killed in the war, or humpty dumpty off of the wall,
don't know but im ready to come up to slaughter the haters, any takers?,
get em all get em all in a lyrical battle ofcourse but stuff it its a waste off time right, id rather pick up a fine liner perfectin' my rhyme all the time i, dont really give a shit about the bitchy attitudes of the dudes on Youtube cuz im too smooth,
like Fonzey back in the da with a pair of cool knew shoes,
make you bounce like a pair of double d's when i want to be im stingin' like a bumble bee,
rapid like a Uzi attackin' like Bruce Lee,
and im done better run better get a better gun than one your usin' now, cuz ur words as a gun isn't doin' it son cuz you never be takin' me down, out out out out im out out.
(Note: Not all youtubers are fuckwits, im just sayin' theres alot of hate, anger, racism, arrogance, dissin' e.t.c. It's just crazy, but oh well, you get that i guess. lol.
Peace.

Category:

Music

Tags:

• rap
• rappers
• hip-hop
• aussie
• fast
• bonethugs
• twista
• eminem
• speedy
• mc
• underground
• australia
• L
• Fiers

[MCTOfCTL]

ye man pretty good fast shit not the best clarity ever but its live so its still pretty tight

[LFiers]

Yeh i admit, it was a bit rough i hadnt rehearsed at all, just rapped it straight after. Cam aint the best either. lol. Thanx man!

[bonethug7]

Again, you have some speed but your flow is way too fragmented and slurred to make anything of it. If you concentrated on lyrics and not speed you'd be better. Right now adding a simile at the end of each line ISN'T good lyricism. I suggest study Tonedeff and Nas. Also I notice that every negative criticism you receive you just dismiss. Not a good idea. You don't have a record deal yet so perhaps you should try to improve from the criticism, as it's obvious I'm not a hater, I'm giving advice.

[LFiers]

Overall, i may agree ith sum things u say but sayin im not quick i wont cuz ive used syllable counters and ive hit up13.5-14.5 syllables per sec n cmon, tell me thats slow. And labeling me as fragmented is just funny. I listened to my shit, n fragmented is not justified. My flows i believe are smooth. Anythn else is subjective. Fuk da haters, i know ur not 1 of em, but u need to re-think what ur trying to say sumtimes. Xplain it beta. Do u have any "pros" ud like to share abt my styles?

[xxivblkk]

lol

[harrythedredd]

v nice

[LFiers]

And that means i dont? Wtf? I do too, i aint gonna get into it cuz theres no point but stop goin on like what u say is all fact dude. ATM aint that good at all, get over it, its my opinion, it may not be yours. Lets agaree to disagree then. How the fuck is my shit fragmented, of all things i may be, that what i believe is the last thing i am. Unless u have a different definition of the word. I appreciate u trying to help but u come across in the rong way. Have u ever said anythn positive abt me?

[bonethug7]

Because most negative comments here are insults, mine aren't. I'm actually trying to help you. And no, I'm not using 'fragmented' as a choice word, it's the best way to describe your rap. ATM's other verses maybe fragmented but his Flow Motion is easily the best example of Caucasian speed rap on YouTube. I was very impressed and believe me I know this music genre very very well.

[LFiers]

(Had to re-write this cuz accidently deleted the 1st 1) Call that advice? Check this, i know u pretty well as a youtuber, weve argued about heaps of shit, but u fukn trippin, u aint checked enuff comments thenn if u think i dismiss all negative comment bro. Dam, its just that it seems like its all u do. I have accepted many n. comments n u dont care to chek em which again seems like u just been negative. Sry man, but ATM aint that good at all. Especially in his flomotion.

[LFiers]

Sory to sound annoyed but i kind of am cuz u think i dismiss all negative comments which i truley dont man. Werent we talkin speed? Check the syllables per second of this n compare it many and then hit me back. I aint been a bastard dude, i like u, u cool, its just every comment from u is negative bro. Seems like it anyway, correctme if im wrong, im a bit drunk now so im proly trippin out. I appoligise if i am. But sayin im fragmented is bs, u only used dat term afta i sed it abt ATM. Fragemted?