this song was made awhile ago now, but feedback is still very much appreciated.
lyrics:
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where did you go
its been so long
ive got a funny feeling
youve done something wrong
dissapear off the face of the earth
never to be heard from ever again
you left us all with nothing but deceiving thoughts
dont come crawling back to us
when everything has turned to dust
you took a change that left us scrambling for a rational reasoning
mass confusion seeps within us all
if you were named sel
you were a fish in the sea
your name and breed
would convey to me
you're selfish
i hope you get my analogy
what the hell is wrong with you
i thought we were friends
you took a change that left us scrambling for a rational reasoning
mass confusion seeps within us all
you left us all with nothing but deceiving thoughts
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The last four lines pretty much make the entire song.
You're quite talented, but there's room for improvement, as with everyone and everything.
Mainly your lyrics, while they work quite well, they kind of take away from the over all feeling and flow of the song.
There's not much of a problem with them for the most part though.
You've got some real talent, keep up the good work.
I'm looking forward to the EP.
Thebloodredsandman 2 years ago
Thanks for the critism and nice words, but what exactly do you mean about the lyrics? I am a bit confused. Cheers!
blordough 2 years ago
To be completely honest, I'm not sure myself. >_>
I had a point I was trying to make, but as I was typing it all just got jumbled up and started to stop making sense. >_>
Thebloodredsandman 2 years ago
haha all good
blordough 2 years ago
greetings from canada!
this stuff is excellent!
have you checked out alexisonfire?
i'll check out your other songs too... am very impressed!
arashleroi 2 years ago
cheers. let me know what you think of my other stuff sometime :) and yes i have heard of alexisonfire, they used to be one of my main bands i listened to.
blordough 2 years ago