Kristen Platt - my composition "Time" (10.09.08)

COMMENT PLEASE:)
Hey everyone!
I began composing this song on 10/09/08 (October 9th, 2008) and it all just pieced together from there. It's my first ever and it felt amazing when i finished it :) constructive criticism is always good though so comments would be awesome :) thankss so much

Also, I had some friends give me their advice (shout outs to Steph and Elaine:P ) and I would love to hear your feedback.

Definitely not my best hahaha but let me know :)
Thanks so much.♥

Lyrics:
Everytime I see you there, i miss you.
I miss your touch i miss your care, i need you.
but every time i see your face, i feel a little better
but i still miss your lips i miss your taste, i need you.

TIME, time, time won't take you away
time, time, time's not there..

you make me smile
just for a little while
and when you're near
i don't want to be anywhere else
but you make me oh so mad
you don't know what we could've had
but there is always time

ooh oh, oh ooh ooooh
oh ohh, where are you
ooh oh, i need you

but every time you say goodbye, i miss you.
it hurts to breathe, it hurts to cry
without you.

time, time, time won't take you away.
time, time, time's not there.

and every time i close my eyes, i see you.
without you here by my side, i want you.

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• Kristen

[KPinthemaking]

wow, thank you so much, that gives me lots of confidence! you're too nice!

[KPinthemaking]

Thanks Carling :)

I am in FR, but yes i go to havergal

love ya

[hosam613]

oh my god, this is amazing, your a small phenomena, im actually in love with you <3 ;) you gonna be something significant gurantee unless the world is blind toward all incredibly amazing artists and living in justin beiber bubbles !!!

[gogreen1010]

love this. miss you Kristen!! <3

[Cristilflow]

sick!

[jeremyunderground41]

nice song!!! go girl

[implainkraez]

tiiiimmmmeeeeee!!! haha love you kristen. :P

[nicko871985]

is a lovely song

(bad audio quality but perfect voice)... i hope you record it iwith best audio quality....

[Val224]

beautiful!

[HeScreamsEpic]

KRISTEN! its Brad from OELC :D

your voice is beautiful :)