SHE ELECTRIFIES ME (Poem by David Randall Curtis)

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Special thanks to the brat Janeczka who gave me a lot of feedback on several drafts of this poem; subscribe to her at: http://www.youtube.com/user/janeczka
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SHE ELECTRIFIES ME

So you wanna hear about the one that got away?

We met at a wine tasting she'd crashed
for the free drinks.

Time had treated her kinder
than the expensive bottles around us.
Lines on her face accentuated
the radiance of her laughter
which kept bursting out
at inappropriate moments
making me envious
of how she was
oblivious to consequence.

Her unconventional appeal reeled me in

and I said,

"You're twice as beautiful as women half your age.
With your cutting charisma and street smart IQ
--you're more intoxicating than any other muse."

She rolled her eyes and replied,

"Honey, you're pretty charming
in a fucked up, arty kind of way
and maybe that's all I should say.
Because I can read your baby blues like a book
--they're telling me I could tear you apart
just by giving you the wrong look."

After I assured her
I had a thick skin
and could handle a relationship
--we got drunk on love, lust and obsession.

And then...

Jesus H. Christ on a stick!

Whenever I try to end the story of my ex
someone always interrupts it
by ordering another round
of shock treatment.

(David Randall Curtis)

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[TheCraigburch]

Thanks for the great poem, I particularly enjoyed the line "With your cutting charisma and streetsmart IQ, you're more intoxicating that any...other...muse." It's a great observation on how sexy a woman is who can laugh without being self conscious. You definantly capture the tone of a conversation in your poem which is really great to hear!

[DavidRandallCurtis]

@TheCraigburch Thanks for the comment. I probably rewrote this more than any other poem I've done. You should see the early drafts--totally different! :P

[ShiekUrBooty]

How did the "brat" get four dislikes in, I thought the system limited posters to one like or dislike per video!

[DavidRandallCurtis]

@ShiekUrBooty I average about 3 to 6 dislikes per poem. When I go on about religion I tend to get more dislikes... the most recent one has 77 likes and 7 dislikes... I'm not sure who you mean when you say "the brat" --although the first person I thought of was Janeczka... :P

[GodsDontExist]

wow, i'm in love for the 2nd time in life , now. well that sucks.

[DavidRandallCurtis]

@GodsDontExist Well, don't worry. The third time will be a charm! :p

[DoorsChick1967]

Very funny and full of bone dry humor. Sharing on fb as well.

[seanallenmccoy]

David, interesting ending "someone always wrecks it by ordering another round of shock...treatment".....seanall­enmccoy

[hr1100]

You put too much thought on women. In reality they really are less than shallow, plain and planar. It's the most peculiar thing - people's ability to give life to things that aren't that lively or completely lifeless and cold. For example: over exaggeration of a story they tell; putting a bigger price on an item that costs much less, like something sentimental; case with females - fooling yourself into thinking they are something more than just mere animals, like males minus dick and brains.

[Largo64]

David, obviously you're completely emotionally healthy . . . in a fucked up, arty kind of way! ;^P

[ShiekUrBooty]

Hahahahahah, you knocked this one out of the park, David!

[BobbyWarrenMiller]

I met a person like this once while I was on R&R from Vietnam. What a package, tiny hands, perfect legs, and a beautiful face with a coat olive colored skin that was stretched tight across a skeleton that was so small I could wrap myself around it and rush off the nearest rainbow. I'm sure we embarrassed the taxi driver with one deep throat kiss after another. Finally in the room it was I who was embarrassed, my rainbow girl had a small penis, but with a few more kisses, I got it to grow.