Pretty good, Rachael. Good song. To help get rid of that "recorded in a garage" sound, I think it would help to mic the drums and add a bit of reverb to the vocals. But I'm sure you're working on that, since this isn't the final mix. The vocals do sound great. Is that you doing the harmony too?
Not quite as funny as last year's fake funeral. Hopefully the other people on the subway car weren't too freaked out.