Kinda late now, but I think you started off pretty well in your first few shots. When it got to the alcohol and pills...it went a little too cliche...your actor moves too quickly for being depressed. He seems more anxious than depressed. Was this shot on film or video?
"Hey dude, what are you doing?"
"I'm writing on the walls."
-that was awesome!
I like your arrangements, but the guy in the middle can't really hit the notes. The growling at the end is great!