I can understand the no vanishing point. all of my songs were written in about 5 min. Then A.D.D takes ahold and i move on to a different song. Also I have just started playing guitar, singing and writing music. So i don't know what a Bridge is or how to make one in the song. Any help would be greatly appreciated! i have more songs on my music page. http://www.facebook.com/Ticket­Down?ref=ts Please give me any and all tips and advice that you can. Thank you Ticket Down

Not bad, somewhat repetitious without a solid bridge. The Line "Let's stop the rewind" is a nice tidbit but it's not strong enough to be made into a hook, which is what you tried to do. Harmony is great, and you have the harmony ability, but it should be used to enhance an already strong statement, not to make a weak statement better.
I like your chops musically, nice counter melody with differentiating instruments, although I think you didn't take it all the way, I.E. you didn't bring me to the Vanishing Point and let me go. It just sort of...stopped. Remember emotion is meant for the whole song and not just particular words. You as an artist have to take your emotion and channel it.

My Name is John, I have over 25 years in Radio and Television, I'm a recording engineer and a Producer. Would you like me to evaluate more of your songs or should I just go screw myself right now?