Two biggest issues I can see (playing purely devil's advocate you understand) are a lack of tripod (camera shake and wobbles was very noticeable) and continuity. One minute the roads and footpath are soaking wet and the sky is overcast and then it is sunny and bright before going back to overcast again. Shadows also gave away that it was not around 5:30pm. Apart from the music, how was it mic'ed? Radio or boom?
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