Punishment

[CaptainJohnKeel]

awesome. I'm not going to be able to sleep tonight but awesome.

[alexluvsu9426]

OMG THIS IS SOOO AMAZING I LOVE IT!!

[Saraluna]

very cool love how fluidly the visuals morphed into each other.

[hillarychapman1]

one of my favorite poems ever

[mikomi123]

I read the poem before I saw this video and I have to say it is absolutely brilliant. It captured the poem so well and was a brilliant remediation of the text.

[cooperjamify]

damn good man

[amilo2008aaaa]

thats enough.. thanx for explanation

[shoemac3]

why did you choose to exclude the last lines of the poem? amazing work - just curious.

[davetherave90]

@shoemac3

not enough time to complete it! university deadlines and all that..... cheers

[sasazoom]

very well made! thumbs up!

[TheMightyCruz]

Terrific!

[ChloeShmoe]

That is absolutely amazing how did you do it?

[davetherave90]

thanks! its all hand drawn, 100s of drawings using berol fineliners, then smudged!

[ChloeShmoe]

That is immense, you must have such great imagery in your head to be able to transfer it to paper, JELOUS!

Hey could you do one to Tichbornes Elegy, it's one of my fav poems its a bit short but should be cool :)

[retribif]

Veramente terrificante. Un video fantastico

[mikekingsfort]

class. simple, uncluttered and powerfull. ta

[Gibsonway]

Wow, that was gloriously macabre. I adored the dark ambiance. The animation was stunning. Bravo

[plhartless]

I can see why her nipples would become the rock that drowns her....but why do her toes become nipples?

[plhartless]

Interesting. I'd like to see you pick up the rest of the poem, esp. the "artful voyeur."...leaving out that arguably makes this video simply voyeuristic rather than a critique of voyeurism.

[sairaahhhh]

thats amazing! so talented. :)

[da1golfnut]

man that is completely awesome, im doing punishment for my higher course this year so is really interesting to see your drawings cheers

[draakon27]

Go watch family guy or something and lighten up :D

Otherwize , great job.

[Lorelei3]

So well-done!

I could feel myself inside this animation, watching everything, and feeling it...

[mutantsatwork]

great job, this is a powerfull poem, a very exxiting creation! bravo!

[haylzS]

you should have finished the poem! but apart from that its great

[eclipse245]

Yeh...UBER emo lmfao

[jjlingjunjie]

Very good job,nice ambience.

[msmodestmouse]

That was great and all but I think I'm going to have nightmares tonight!!!!

hehehe

LOL!

[jas26n]

awesome visuals and definitely emo...

[davetherave90]

haha, thanks, if it does come across emo then it wasn't intentional...

[Erictheeviltwin]

@davetherave90 Just curious, but what do you take at University? You mentioned University deadlines and stuff... just wondering hahaa :-)

[daradamdam]

I like your poetry..

so dark

but it's beauty

i should known you

i think you're pretty

it's a nice animation

make more...

[WielkiBrat07]

About my god! Very but it psychological very. Whole our peppered world describes in my opinion.

[Kosa1133]

Very, very Cool ;)

[hanaRIPPER]

im gna sound wierd but these kind of animations really terrify me ...i get all short of breath watching them ..thort id try it tho ...omg lol ahhhh hehe

[cloudman59]

it scared me too, but great animation i like your style

[LucyJaneoxo]

That Was ....HMMMM Cool

[FadyenRS]

That was pretty disturbing.. fucking fantastic!

I like Seamus Heaney too, good poem.

[girlovesyou]

wow. this was breath taking.

[rachthegreat2]

whoa! fucking scary! incredible (and its a fantastic poem too) how about the whole version tho? the full poem is amazin...

[makinblack1114]

deeply disturbing!

[tetsutahime]

beautifully done. my only critique is that the gunshot at the end is a bit anachronistic. but the animation, artwork, and musical choice is starkly beautiful and haunting. Unbelievable that its your first ever animation. Make More!!!

[davetherave90]

thankyou, yeah, the gunshot was a last minute addition - it made us laugh at the time, but it is really unnessessary now, kinda spoils it a bit

[cloudman59]

i agree... it made me jump lol

[justwatching9]

superb =)this is one of my favorite poems, your animation is eerily magnificent

[nitesshadow]

I've been studing Punishment in Eng lit for quite some time and this is just... I want to say gorgeous but terrifying at the same time.

The sounds perfectly compliment the video, it's amazing, well done.

[blackmage223]

Darkly gorgeous

[spacecowboynj]

Very Pink Floyd "The Wall"-ish.

[aonrach]

beautiful & emotive.

[MRMW89]

nice film