I think the background music is too loud to be able to audibly understand the message beign relayed. In addition, I agree with someone else's comment that perhaps varrying the intonation and variation of the rhyming may make it less monotone..
It needs more energy and a bit more "flow" try more variation in the structure of the rhymes. They have the same pattern through the whole song which makes it less interesting.
For a person not habitually committed to listening to this venue of "music" (actually do not view rap as music at all but... noise it is) , I found yours to be tolerably entertaining. However, I had trouble hearing every word - the words being clear enough were the emphasis placed on the words (the most important part of education, don't you know?) Perhaps a better acoustical setting would improve the quality of the entire production.
This rap made me itch - but it also made me laugh a lot.. Thanks, Mordy!
mgeff200 3 months ago
I think the background music is too loud to be able to audibly understand the message beign relayed. In addition, I agree with someone else's comment that perhaps varrying the intonation and variation of the rhyming may make it less monotone..
moleic60 5 months ago
Maybe you should rap about how to get rid of and prevent bedbugs? ...seems a little more important to me.
revjaymz 5 months ago
It needs more energy and a bit more "flow" try more variation in the structure of the rhymes. They have the same pattern through the whole song which makes it less interesting.
TijdTekort 5 months ago
Agreed, less sound more voice, go morty.
rsechler79 5 months ago
Cute! music is too loud hard to understand all the words.
suzique99 5 months ago
i wish the music was turned down a little so i could hear the guy better.
nice work though
uzmaabbas 6 months ago
For a person not habitually committed to listening to this venue of "music" (actually do not view rap as music at all but... noise it is) , I found yours to be tolerably entertaining. However, I had trouble hearing every word - the words being clear enough were the emphasis placed on the words (the most important part of education, don't you know?) Perhaps a better acoustical setting would improve the quality of the entire production.
melangham1 6 months ago