Pretty good trailer. I'm gonna go check out the story now. Just one thing. When you're listing all the things Derek has the periods just kinda throw it off. A period marks the end of a sentence and I feel that all the things you're listing Derek has should flow together and the periods don't let them do that.
Pretty good trailer. I'm gonna go check out the story now. Just one thing. When you're listing all the things Derek has the periods just kinda throw it off. A period marks the end of a sentence and I feel that all the things you're listing Derek has should flow together and the periods don't let them do that.
kalinabelle 2 years ago