that was alright but, you should try and put more multi rhymes when you rap. the way your rhyming here is like nursery rhymes. I felt the chorus was pretty well written. its just that I'm a multi rhyming junkie, its really hard for me to respect a rap without multi's. but good never the less
Oh I would say you need to flow to the beat and try to match your flow with the rhythm of the beat you know? If you enjoy writing, you'll naturally improve.
And the mic quality and off-rhythm raps make it hard to understand you too. I can tell you're saying a lot though lol so at least you have something to say.
what a great quality microphone haha
old school JKJones is dope
iluv2kikflip 1 year ago
that was alright but, you should try and put more multi rhymes when you rap. the way your rhyming here is like nursery rhymes. I felt the chorus was pretty well written. its just that I'm a multi rhyming junkie, its really hard for me to respect a rap without multi's. but good never the less
vice2vursa 2 years ago
ya i think ive improved on my rhyme schemes since i made this i just barely record anything
jemar200 2 years ago
never kneel to anyone like 300. like that line. Never seen the movie, but Spartans are cool :)
keep growing.
sacredshakti 2 years ago
thanks man
jemar200 2 years ago
Yeah man that's better man
iluv2kikflip 2 years ago
good
jemar200 2 years ago
Oh I would say you need to flow to the beat and try to match your flow with the rhythm of the beat you know? If you enjoy writing, you'll naturally improve.
And the mic quality and off-rhythm raps make it hard to understand you too. I can tell you're saying a lot though lol so at least you have something to say.
StillAware 2 years ago
thnks for the feed back and ya i do like writing ill try to improve i mean i don't exactly have that much experience yet
jemar200 2 years ago
S QUAN!!!
Duece416 2 years ago
lol y u sayin shaq's name?
jemar200 2 years ago
lol no reason
Duece416 2 years ago
ight lol
jemar200 2 years ago