iLovePhotos Elevator Pitch

[callous21]

If you just so happen to meet someone in an elevator with some influence you gotta have an elevator pitch.

At first I thought"elevator pitch?... How to sell elevators?

[RoethTube]

ehm, you talk clear, but... it's far 2 long my friend

[iluvmnkeys1]

you sound like dane cook

[Startechgirl]

Sorry was not convinced - seems like you are reading a teleprompter. Your weak point is that you're very factual (tmi) but do not convey any emotion. Who is your audience? Customers? Investors? Body language: your talk is "serious" but ur face says otherwise (ur talk is 2 articulated). We can see u bounce on ur chair and moving your hands, it shows enthusiasm but would be best if that was actually shown (and not through a window reflection). Anyway thanks for sharing - and good luck.

[lorenzsell]

@Startechgirl hey, that was great feedback. thank you. btw, what does "tmi" mean?

[Startechgirl]

@lorenzsell tmi = too much info

[Teddjenkins]

@lorenzsell tmi means 'too much information'

[Vaiktorg]

@lorenzsell tmi = too much info =)

[zander7x7]

Yeah man, the t-shirt is a big turn off. Male + Pink shirt = crazy~

[tehCrasx]

@zander7x7 why is a pink shirt a turn off? stop letting gender roles control you.

[zander7x7]

@tehCrasx Believing that a guy wearing pink isn't weird is a pitch in itself. It was hard to listen to what he was saying because the odd colored shirt distracted me. I don't really believe in the idea that men can wear anything women can... I'd rather not go into detail about it...

[Drumsinstopmotion]

Your a tool

[gtarbmx]

you still talk too much. i lost you attention 20 seconds in

[lorenzsell]

how could i make it better?

[gtarbmx]

by general rule those pitches should be one minute, i bet you could make this one 30 sec while retaining all of the content. it would have a much better effect

[angelilic12312]

@lorenzsell Give motion, show your hands. Just stand up.

[Vaiktorg]

@lorenzsell visuals, green screens help too (its not difficult), 2 persons giving out information is fun to watch! (preferably a guy and a girl)... idk stuff! =)

[Forzaabruzzo]

Your pitch was well articulated and well delivered overall. You made sure not to ramble on and got straight to the point as to what makes your company/product unique. The only downside of it though was the occasional usage of tech jargon that may throw off or confuse people who aren't the most tech savy. Other than that though it was an excellent pitch :)

[satyajitsahu]

nice pitch. Convincing, except the t-shirt

[jcage007]

the tshirt was too gayish

[Glamdering]

Wow, I wasn't sold when the video first came on. The shirt took me a minute to figure out as a piece of branding and your general image made me think - oh shit another Friday night party service.

Your flow, confidence and description though left me eager to try your software and i've signed up for beta. Very nice work, one of the stronger - if surprisingly so - videos so far.

[obeattie]

Nice one Lorenz, looks great; your office view certainly is a lot more impressive than the elevator :D

Now, we all want t-shirts!