Forbiden Fruit: the tempation of Edward Cullen Chapter 1

[SEVENTEENCINEMA]

This isn't far off from the source material.

[HanataroKikumiya]

Wow this is almost as bad as "Da Sezzy Advenchurs of Balla an Ewdard"..............

[halowarrior1000]

She was doing some Alopecia in the locker.

[LMTR14]

vicky pollard proofread this?

[LMTR14]

first 3 lines of the story already tell me this is a trollfic

[EeveeTheFox]

what is this I don't even

[KagamineLenX3]

Violin Concerto in E minor, Op. 64 by Mendelssohn <333 Your taste in music is superb.

[clarkispotamia]

dear god. this is the funniest shit i've ever heard

[britophilia]

THE MENDELSSOHN <3

[matty406]

A voice like... Wet Heaven?

What?

[BattyKatty35]

Does anyone else think of DW from that kids show Arthur whenever he says BTW?

[MittyAnime]

Mint and cinnamon? Doesn't sound like the coolest idea ever.

Dave and Murry? They government let that happen?

her body got hold and cold at the same time? She's menopausal!

[RisingDeathAngel]

I...I think I just had a stroke...

[myaccount4favorites]

Dear Jove, someone needs to remove themselves from the gene pool.

[Ap0ske]

Watch where you're freaking going you ASSHOLE!

(I have anger problems)

[katsy0c0]

XDDDDDDD I couldn't keep a straight face at all.

[SuteishiiChanXxX]

Listening to this with the story up on the screen completely made my day! XD Keep up the awesomeness!!

[HetaliaLOL]

Mint and cinnamon? Oh God, my subconcious scents are puking already...

[blackrabbit636]

Nothing, and I mean nothing, could compare to My Immortal. My Immortal is a work of both genius and stupidly. I don't know whether the author was serious or not but if she was, it just adds to the humour of it all.

This story is okay, but it isn't as funny. I think it obviously spawned off My Immortal as inspiration.

[Linttaro]

This isn't as good as Time Machine, but it's as good as My Immortal.

This is brilliant, i love you.

[LMTR14]

@Linttaro yeah obviously it's not since this is clearly a my immortal ripoff

[Xarixian]

XD Oh dear.

You read this like my Year 6 teacher used to read out our creative English stories.

What an atrocious story!

I love this. Thanks for giving me a good laugh :D

[whitewolfalicara]

AHG!! This hurts more than My Immortal did. At least My Immortal was funny...I don't know how you do it, KMxHearts, but thank you for this (unintentional?) bout of comedy.

[Romanticanime4ever]

hahahaha good job!

[Drewski217]

XDDD

this is EPIC XD

Will we see dumblydore appear?

[210h1disg1n]

She's lying. She doesn't have dyslexia.

Nice music.

[PeijiGozonji]

Running anti-lopes. My new favorite animal.

[LuckyStarAlice13]

at least badly written fanfics can make you laugh

[wearerocketscientist]

i love badly written fanfics. <3

[ragingchaosgod]

MANCARROT!

[Joyride37]

Bad fanfics are the new form of crack.

[tcnguyen01]

For the suicidal this fanfic has a drinking game on tvtropes, preferably try soda please.

[yojez]

god help us all the world is going to hell in a handbasket and this is the first sign of hte coming apocalypse....

[ThreeBooksInTheFire]

holy crap this is so bad DDD:

[DarkenCheChanChani]

Same troll who wrote the Harry Potter fanfailfic with Ebony in it is MY GOD. <3<3<3

[EmmileneRosalina]

omg u ppl r so meeeen ths ws suc a gud stori 2 reed :(((

(Nice reading, please keep it up!)

[k0sm1k]

a work of art.

[MoonIMover]

The first three-and-a-half minutes are just the protagonist describing herself to us.

I've had my suspicions for a while, but now I have confirmation: I am in hell. It's the only explanation for stuff like this existing.

By the way, Dear Miss Mac: If you hate people staring at you, stop dressing so wierdly!

5:32 Yes, yes I am!

[lamnaa]

She's got a Commonwealth Star birthmark. She's really an Australian!

Nice reading by the who.

[perilsofrosella]

heres yur 5th gud reviw NOW update.

Hahah, just kidding. Great job. I laughed so hard I almost cried! I don't know how you read some of the lines without laughing, either!

[ashmal15]

this made me lol. is it for real? the pics are class.

[Iceburg116]

2:52

Never thought beautiful could get so ugly.

[Morageist]

hahahaha! please post more!

[Lahkae]

badfics ftw