You let a big chance to show Sev's love for Hermi slip by skipping through the entire 2nd year.
It's a waste of time in the song; you could have had Snape look at Hermione from different angles in class or something, rather than keeping the tree&slo-mo horse guy. :)
Without the summary at the side I would have trouble discovering what this series is about. ^.^; Sorry love.
But yeah it's only part 1 and there are lots of parts coming up I'm sure. x3;
From 1:22 to 1:38 I see a near-still of the Whomping Willow and Hogwarts. That's a long bit of the song going to waste right there. I'm guessing it's supposed to symbolize the summer holidays but 16 seconds is a LONG time in a music video.
1:43-2:11 there's the ghost-rider thing... In slow-mo. I think it doesn't really fit in because I can't discover what it's purpose is there.
Then at the end it's all fine! =D Like... The footage you used.
Ok I said I'd check it out so here I am! Episode 1!
First thing I notice is your plot. x3; It's not a plot, it's a summary of the video. So... either name it 'summary' or leave out a bunch of details. ;D No offence, trying to help. <3
Now the video itself:
The beginning is fine. x3; Maybe you could use like.. an opening theme for your series? It's not necessary but I personally like to be able to tell by the video itself that it's part of the series. (continuing in next comment box)
whats the name of the song?
whit0utname 3 years ago
@whit0utname its sang by miley/hannah i can't mind what its called but i remember it was playiing in my toothbrush when i was little lol
laurenlovestomfelton 1 month ago
You let a big chance to show Sev's love for Hermi slip by skipping through the entire 2nd year.
It's a waste of time in the song; you could have had Snape look at Hermione from different angles in class or something, rather than keeping the tree&slo-mo horse guy. :)
Without the summary at the side I would have trouble discovering what this series is about. ^.^; Sorry love.
But yeah it's only part 1 and there are lots of parts coming up I'm sure. x3;
3*
I'm off to watch part 2
dukedevlinluvah 3 years ago
From 1:22 to 1:38 I see a near-still of the Whomping Willow and Hogwarts. That's a long bit of the song going to waste right there. I'm guessing it's supposed to symbolize the summer holidays but 16 seconds is a LONG time in a music video.
1:43-2:11 there's the ghost-rider thing... In slow-mo. I think it doesn't really fit in because I can't discover what it's purpose is there.
Then at the end it's all fine! =D Like... The footage you used.
dukedevlinluvah 3 years ago
Ok I said I'd check it out so here I am! Episode 1!
First thing I notice is your plot. x3; It's not a plot, it's a summary of the video. So... either name it 'summary' or leave out a bunch of details. ;D No offence, trying to help. <3
Now the video itself:
The beginning is fine. x3; Maybe you could use like.. an opening theme for your series? It's not necessary but I personally like to be able to tell by the video itself that it's part of the series. (continuing in next comment box)
dukedevlinluvah 3 years ago
mossclaw what happened to the one about snapes childhood? i really wanted to c dat one!
siriusblack340 3 years ago
ok mossclaw i'm gana give it a try...i hope i like it...lol
siriusblack340 3 years ago
Eekk! I liked it~ Can't wait for part two!! I can tell this series is gonna be great! ^~^
YuNaHime 3 years ago