I Think We Should...

[spiderdragon1969]

I think we should fuck!

[leftysergeant]

I think it works quite well. Perhaps a little more minimalist than some of the other bits I have seen here, but then, it is never wise to lock oneself in the same box all the time, in any art.

[preacherman777]

It's not HORRIBLE at all. As is generally the case, I find your poetry very interesting.

[nonoctave]

Wow, what a revelation Peri's song was to this.

It's a brilliant song, yet as a poem I wasn't relating to it.

So... Stef, it turns out you are a lyricist.

[kenrg]

I can't believe I missed this over the weekend! Luckily Peri saw how brilliant it was and pointed us back here. The whole thing is perfect, but my favorite line is "take our loneliness out on each other." Just brilliant.

[Inabikari1510]

Thank you... Peri surprised me with that little treat yesterday and I dunno if I've ever been more flattered!

[livingpassion]

Whoops! Haha the danger of signing on using friend's computers is forgetting to make sure you're really signed in as yourself!

[kfentar]

this is really good. i just listened to the song version of it, and your lyrics sound beautiful with periurban's music.

[livingpassion]

Peri's music took it to a new level! :) Thanks a ton.

[KennyWrites]

I liked it! Nice phrases in there, like nordicsky said. Someone should set this to music... Oh, someone did! :)

[livingpassion]

And an amazing job he did of it too! Thanks Kenny

[brignoni68]

Very nice! Nice and soothing vocal tone, as well.

[livingpassion]

Thanks!

[dburr13]

Brilliant as a poem or a music lyric...I was very impressed.

[livingpassion]

Thank you so much. What Peri did with it was wonderful!

[NewWarriorMan]

Well done!

[livingpassion]

Thank you! This comment led me to your page, which led me to see that somewhere along the line I ended up unsubscribed on accident. Problem remedied. :)

[NewWarriorMan]

Bless you!

[cycleview]

I liked it very much! Especially I think we should,Skip all the apologies,Go straight to the forgiving.

How is your sister Mandy?

[livingpassion]

Mandy is good... just a busy wife lol. And thank you! Those first few lines were all that existed for this piece for a quite a while and I think they are my favorites as well.

[Darvids0n]

I love that you pause at the start of the video. Such a poser, Stef :P Naw, it was grande. Like the Starbucks size that I've never had because I've never been to Starbucks and I also don't drink coffee.

And it IS hard to write a story (or a poem for that matter) when the words just don't belong. FRUSTRATION CITY! That's my little comment rant.

[eefgirl]

I like it. it's very sweet and simple

[Chivalryaintdead]

Totally agree with that.

[nordicsky]

I think this is rather better than you believe. It comes across like a conversation and it's definitely written in your new, much looser style. There are loads of good ideas in this poem, I like

"Skip all the apologies

Go straight to the forgiving"

"take our loneliness out on each other"

However the best thing about this poem is that you wrote it and that your are back writing again.

Best wishes from one poet to another,

Love, Peter

[livingpassion]

Thank you Peter! A compliment from one poet to another is the best kind!

[bnessel1973]

I really liked it, so screw you if you didn't. : )

[livingpassion]

You know what... I think it's mostly my reading I didn't care for. But thanks Brian that's sweet... in a very aggressive sort of way. haha

[maulermacall]

I think you should show a little more cleavege

[livingpassion]

Yea... but see then I'd never get ANYONE to listen to what I had to say...

[lllutzke]

beautiful