No probs man. Its all a huge learning curve, as you know. Best to try and work everything out first, like really well thought out. then draw up storyboards and fill everyone in on wot u plan on doing. Lastly, i just noticed at the beginning of the film: dragging a person into a warehouse in broad daylight, and a red car drives past who would have seen the killer doing everything. Hes caught! LOL!
@JoeFitzpatrick1 : Change the camera angle then :P lol! in the warehouse, as hes dragging the body in, the camera cud have been on the floor next to the shutters, looking up to the action; as he drags the body in. U cud then pan across with the action and no one would have seen outside in the film itself. Im guessing u only have 1 camera, but u cud make a dolly system to slide the camera along the floor to get a sweeping shot instead of panning across with your hands. nomorecharactersleft.
Read other post first: You could have added 1 extra scene between him lifting the hammer, and the hammer hitting the head. Once your killer lifted the hammer, you cud have added a scene showing the hammer above his head, this way you could have got the cut right and your victim could have moved out of the way and put the dummy in place ready, where it could have shown him swinging the hammer down, hitting the head in one shot. It wud b harder on continuity, but wud have worked a bit better.
@splatterngore Second comment lol. More films will be on the way and hopefully i would have learnt from the mistakes. Again thank you for the comments and stuff i'll take them all into account :-D
Not too bad at all. Quite enjoyed it. I know u havent had a budget for this short but the only thing i would give "constructive criticism" on is the edit at 4.20. you notice him lift up the hammer then pause, then the cut comes in; the hammer hitting the head. this edit is a tad slow, and not cut right. its only off by a couple of frames. sorry to sound pedantic, but hey, your in the "film business" now and have to be able to take it on the chin. Overall, very nice. Love the gore!! 4/5
@splatterngore Thank you for the comment :) I know about that, It was even worse before I uploaded this lmao. I really should sort that out and i'll do it before I upload the final Cheers :-) And about the extra scene, I wanted to reshoot the whole hammer scene but I didn't have the time unfortunatley. And the hammer hit out of shot and it was a one shot only tihng. It's a shame really, but it's the best that I can do. I can't really go back to the warehouse anymore to film more. Ranoutofwords!
No probs man. Its all a huge learning curve, as you know. Best to try and work everything out first, like really well thought out. then draw up storyboards and fill everyone in on wot u plan on doing. Lastly, i just noticed at the beginning of the film: dragging a person into a warehouse in broad daylight, and a red car drives past who would have seen the killer doing everything. Hes caught! LOL!
splatterngore 2 years ago
@splatterngore lmao, i couldn't really help that though, it was a used set of work warehouses every few seconds things were going past :P
JoeFitzpatrick1 2 years ago
@JoeFitzpatrick1 : Change the camera angle then :P lol! in the warehouse, as hes dragging the body in, the camera cud have been on the floor next to the shutters, looking up to the action; as he drags the body in. U cud then pan across with the action and no one would have seen outside in the film itself. Im guessing u only have 1 camera, but u cud make a dolly system to slide the camera along the floor to get a sweeping shot instead of panning across with your hands. nomorecharactersleft.
splatterngore 2 years ago
Read other post first: You could have added 1 extra scene between him lifting the hammer, and the hammer hitting the head. Once your killer lifted the hammer, you cud have added a scene showing the hammer above his head, this way you could have got the cut right and your victim could have moved out of the way and put the dummy in place ready, where it could have shown him swinging the hammer down, hitting the head in one shot. It wud b harder on continuity, but wud have worked a bit better.
splatterngore 2 years ago
@splatterngore Second comment lol. More films will be on the way and hopefully i would have learnt from the mistakes. Again thank you for the comments and stuff i'll take them all into account :-D
JoeFitzpatrick1 2 years ago
Not too bad at all. Quite enjoyed it. I know u havent had a budget for this short but the only thing i would give "constructive criticism" on is the edit at 4.20. you notice him lift up the hammer then pause, then the cut comes in; the hammer hitting the head. this edit is a tad slow, and not cut right. its only off by a couple of frames. sorry to sound pedantic, but hey, your in the "film business" now and have to be able to take it on the chin. Overall, very nice. Love the gore!! 4/5
splatterngore 2 years ago
@splatterngore Thank you for the comment :) I know about that, It was even worse before I uploaded this lmao. I really should sort that out and i'll do it before I upload the final Cheers :-) And about the extra scene, I wanted to reshoot the whole hammer scene but I didn't have the time unfortunatley. And the hammer hit out of shot and it was a one shot only tihng. It's a shame really, but it's the best that I can do. I can't really go back to the warehouse anymore to film more. Ranoutofwords!
JoeFitzpatrick1 2 years ago