I like how the beat flows and how your voice sounds, but you need to work on the flow of the lyrics and keeping the listeners attention. I liked the song but it didn't keep my full attention through the whole song.
Your lyrics are very good! the best lyric in teh world can be said in any song, but it's all about the delivery. Work on your delivery and you have a rap song! Check our version if you like! we posted it up yesterday! <3
Something here to help you out. Once you write a song, don't ever go with a recording the first night. Keep rapping it over and over for a few days when you have time, that way you will start adding certain nuances to the song as you're memorizing it. Then your flow, delivery, and emotion will come more smoothly and naturally. Once you have a song totally memorized in your mind, it works wonders for you. You're on the right path though, just don't get yourself in a hurry to do a recording.
@fiarano The one who originated the beat. I like to listen to a beat, then I'll check out to hear what others did with the beat whether they make a song or a rap.
5 stars
ShortfilmSpecialist 3 months ago
I like how the beat flows and how your voice sounds, but you need to work on the flow of the lyrics and keeping the listeners attention. I liked the song but it didn't keep my full attention through the whole song.
Chimkmunk 6 months ago
Your lyrics are very good! the best lyric in teh world can be said in any song, but it's all about the delivery. Work on your delivery and you have a rap song! Check our version if you like! we posted it up yesterday! <3
MGBandQXG 7 months ago
Something here to help you out. Once you write a song, don't ever go with a recording the first night. Keep rapping it over and over for a few days when you have time, that way you will start adding certain nuances to the song as you're memorizing it. Then your flow, delivery, and emotion will come more smoothly and naturally. Once you have a song totally memorized in your mind, it works wonders for you. You're on the right path though, just don't get yourself in a hurry to do a recording.
Torn80cj 8 months ago
@Torn80cj Thanks for the advice man. im gonna try it with the next song.
Also, can I ask? How did you find this video?
fiarano 8 months ago
@fiarano The one who originated the beat. I like to listen to a beat, then I'll check out to hear what others did with the beat whether they make a song or a rap.
Torn80cj 8 months ago
its good man, i like the lyrics,
try and smooth out your flow though..and rap like your enjoying it sounds more like someones forcing you to do it.
MulattoC 8 months ago
@MulattoC
Yeah, I need more flow, emotion, and delivery. But thanks.
fiarano 8 months ago
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msek333 8 months ago
wow you're really good! rap with more emotion :)
Davidino230 8 months ago
fuck man, 20 minutes? what a boss.
infernoman11 8 months ago
good good :)
hockeyterriaki 8 months ago
sick stuff, good work bro
demattman23 8 months ago