My scary story(read description)

[missblackshot21]

That was good and thxs for the music and if that was real i would be sooo sorry for u!!!

[16kynewell]

Not gonna lie.... but that was terrible

[taniya620]

Thnxs 4 the music cuz wenever I would read a scary story on utube wivout music or any noise I would get shit scared but thanks cuz I didnt get scared

[IanCounty]

ok i'm scared because my room is next to the bathroom but i'm by myself. i hate you!!!!!! jk don't take it offensivly and start cutting!!! I love you even though i don't know you at all!!! Yay!!! ok bye

[breezy80300]

it was ok

[sparklesrock254]

It was ok.

[mwbmc]

you got raped by a ghost

[xxhigheelsxx]

most unscariest horror stories ever scary stuff happens in my housse lol im going to make a video offf all the things that happend in my house even my mum gets scared my best friend got kicked and my mums covers got pulled off and people shout for me if u want to be scared come to my house

[Freak4Avatar]

Im sorry but WTF?

[superduperham2001]

STUPIDDD! U STOOPID! THUMBS UP IF YOU THOUGHT THIS WAS STOOPID XD >.<

[skatebomb22]

is it true?

[DarKanGelGurlZZ]

y demi lavato singing? try scary music :)

[RandomGuyInAHat]

I think the music was scarier than the story.

[backslash75]

ummm.. I can sleep and be alone after this...

[poppadoms592]

It's ok i suppose. The only advice I could give you is:

1. You use a repetition of words too often (e.g ... there faces were all bloodied with chunks falling off their faces)

2. You didn't explain the ending enough. It felt like you rushed the conclusion too much.

3. Some of your grammar isn't correct and you aren't using adventurous vocabulary.

I hope I helped and don't take this the wrong way cuz I actually liked this story. Just keep going and you will get better with time.

[TeamFamousV4]

I get the end.....kinda. Im guessing that the thing either followed u guys when the family moved or the things are just happing ur sis......idk

[basketballer6226]

demi lovato definetly made this video scarier.

[Godbeliever1999]

Don't get it o.O weird

[Gwen4everandever]

umm when that part said about the tolit flushing when i read that it actully flushed!!!

[YouDieHaveANiceLife]

My great grandma could write something better. And that's sad because my great grandma is 80.

[taraflina]

OMG! UR AMAZING AT WRITING STORIES U SHOULD BECOME AN AUTHOR XX!!

UR SO AMAZING PLEASE WRITE MORE TO THAT STORY , PLEASE PLEASE??!! IT WAS BRILLIANT!!

[neyoroxmysox]

i dont care for it too much no offense!!!

[gillece]

wait your sister banging her head into the wall like a retard isn't normal? cus my sister always does it.

[selenagomezrocks8800]

@gillece NO ITS NORMAL I ALWAYS DO THAT JK

[kyletube123456789]

i have to give you a thumbs up for that it was good

[xoalicia23xo]

omg im never going in my bathroom agen XD

[xoxKatieBaileyxox]

i liked that, good job :)

[cloudypeak69]

What book did you read lol?

[ALVAREZr7]

GAY

[aaliahnguyen]

the story scared me alittle bit but good story though

[RyderGuy007]

Awesome story man, gave me the chills, you should make part 2 since you put the "my sister woke up to the toilet flushing" thing in.

[shadow64100]

Very good

[chandler907]

LOL This was good. i like the part where chunks were falling of their faces!

[07leacox]

well it's not bad it's defo better than my story's :) nice one

[yoannajust4u]

not the best but good, and if is made just by you then well done! bravo!

[dannilovestosing]

ahah yea i agreee with the not the best part, but thanx heeps:)

[daddyslittlegurll]

wow good story. had me going! lol :)

[forsthe]

I like how it said "But that was only the beginning." suspense...

[imafantoallanimation]

does it have any pictures in it because if they are scarey i don't want to watch it

[ReneeRoxUrSox]

lol i dont think it was the best idea to say lol at the end but good job.... haha =D

[YlvisSister]

I agree :P Great story

[dannilovestosing]

lol thanx =)

[imafantoallanimation]

hey man i know this is not real and all but i heard a noise in my room when i was asleep and it was all quiet i was freaked out man and my mum thinks it was next door nebour but it wasn't it was in my room at night