"Slips, Trips, and Falls" - WSIB Workplace Safety Contest 2010

[thechurchofdave]

Things you did get right.

Over all premise was decent but script should have been more developed. Probably needed a few more rewrites to get the story to flow more effectively and get the audience more interested and invested in the outcome.

Camera work was decent.

Fairly good setups and angels used.

Sound worked OK.

Editing was mostly smooth and functional.

Graphics were OK though the execution was poorly handled.

The final product was clear but in the real wold wrong format = fired.

[thechurchofdave]

You were bitching out some guy for bein creative so I thought I'd see what you could do.

Constructive criticism from my 26 years in the film industry.

1. Too slow. Needs to move faster. Never grabs the audience.

2. OK start lost momentum fast.

3. Scenes which had no purpose.

4. Using cliche shots for no reason.

5. Wrong choice of music for the subject.

6. Dual themes of action and text don't sync correctly.

7. Incomplete ending. Family in set up is absent in reaction at ending.

C+

[VidMasterflex]

@thechurchofdave The idea was to not give an identity to the main character but a mere framework for an average person in the work force to fit into. The added family in the beginning was to signify that that a vast majority of people in the workforce have a family and children. To add their reaction was unnecessary and would have thrown off the principle of the video.

It was my communications tech teacher that fucked up and exported it like that. He is stuck in the God damn stoneagewithAdobe

[thechurchofdave]

@VidMasterflex That sucks about yer teacher fuckin that up. So I retract my comment about that. Obviously not yer fault. I stand by the rest of my critique Although I obviously never read the actual requirements of the assignment so my apologies for critiques of things out of your control.

[archerdude7]

Also you stloe your vids name.

:..(

[VidMasterflex]

@archerdude7 The name used for the vid is actually a fairly generic name for a safety video. It is nor ever was copyrighted to a certain individual video already made so no, the name was not stolen from anything but borrowed.

[thechurchofdave]

@VidMasterflex You cannot copyright a tittle so it can't be stolen. 

[archerdude7]

@vidmasterflex

Three things

1- one lucus owned you!!

2- you did not win

3- A guy from our school and his gay egg video won (erik labranche)

[VidMasterflex]

@archerdude7

Lucas didn't own shit, I owned him that's probably why he took his sad excuse for a video down.

We were disqualified. We would've easily owned all of you with this, but the facts used weren't cited. They emailed confirming we were definently considered in the top 3; however, were eliminated due to what I just outlined.

Mistakes were made, we learned from them.

[VidMasterflex]

This will also be re-upped, it's in the wrong format, it was filmed on HD anamorphic wide-screen and for some reason was exported incorrectly.

[tomjen510]

Oustanding Video!!!

[Lucus94]

Fake and gay, who dies after falling off a ladder

[VidMasterflex]

@Lucus94 Is that a serious question? Any trauma to the back of the head produces the possibility of death. Even a fall from not even a foot can cause death if one lands on the back of their head a certain way. I cannot believe how ignorant your comment is of reality.

[Lucus94]

@VidMasterflex He had an helmet >:O and your video is too long for nothing

[VidMasterflex]

@Lucus94 The limit for the contest was 2-4 minutes I believe, so were within guidelines. They wouldn't have left those guidelines if they didn't expect anyone to follow them. As you can clearly see in the last shot, the camera pans right and you can see the helmet wobbling on the ground since it fell off of his head when he was falling, hard-hats aren't meant for falls, they are meant for falling objects.

[Lucus94]

@VidMasterflex The limit was 5 min max but still, quality vs. quantity, it's better to have a nice short video than a long video that could have been shorter, to get straight to the point.

[VidMasterflex]

@Lucus94 That is true; however, this was a video contest and a video with info as well as an easy-to-follow and very simple storyline is most certainly acceptable.

[thechurchofdave]

@Lucus94 A guy on the set of a film I won't name died after a 4 foot fall by landing on the back of his skull on concrete. I guy I worked with on another film watched it happen after complaining about the dangerous situation numerous times.