Please work on your breathing and delivery. One of the first things I noticed was the wheezy inhaling in between every line, and with good rappers, you rarely, if ever do.
It sounds a bit like you have a stuffy nose when you rap, I'm not sure if it's allergies or what, but if not, then less nasal delivery would better fit this song. I do enjoy the music and beat, very chill. Unfortunately, I don't think the rapping supplements the song as well as it could. No hating, just critiquing. GL!
lol i like how you smirked at the end. YAY VISION!!! \o/
chobohippo 7 months ago
Please work on your breathing and delivery. One of the first things I noticed was the wheezy inhaling in between every line, and with good rappers, you rarely, if ever do.
It sounds a bit like you have a stuffy nose when you rap, I'm not sure if it's allergies or what, but if not, then less nasal delivery would better fit this song. I do enjoy the music and beat, very chill. Unfortunately, I don't think the rapping supplements the song as well as it could. No hating, just critiquing. GL!
y2kye 7 months ago
rocking it!
annielee022 7 months ago
Yeahhh Vision doing it BIG :D
linkuser0 7 months ago