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your voice is so soft it makes me almost fall to sleep, i mean seriously come on do some night relax voices

isus09 2 years ago

Beautiful words...very nice. Thanks for sharing. :)

jdfox1 2 years ago

The poem isn't meant to be a debate however it is a clear political statement...sort of like everything...no one can put something out without an agenda...it's not humanly possible.

On the flip side, I like it :)

rooftopeagle 2 years ago

It most certainly does have an agenda. It's not a debate because it doesn't show both sides or care to.... It's about one love, one experience, one mind-bending, life altering thought.... It's about putting myself in someone else's shoes. And it's about how I (and in this context, only what I believe matters) believe that love is love is love.... as long as it's informed and consensual, I don't believe in binding it to tradition.

thelitcorner 2 years ago

This was beautiful. Wow.

JustForTheDead 2 years ago

ballard reference?

CantCopeWontCope 2 years ago

hmm.... this is an interesting poem but i need to see this written down to comment on it.

for me, verbal poetry needs a certain edge.... the way you say words are just as important as the words himself.... things like how you are stressing words too much, and the actual staccato-like sounds you make with your words put it off for me... sorry

BTW, sorry if I was a bit harsh but i just was editing my friends Music EP and we are trying to make it perfect... still in that mode i suppose : 3 jana!

chickwithfootieson 2 years ago

There is plenty to be said about the way poetry should be written, or shouldn't be. How it should be read or shouldn't. But when all is said and done, all that matters is that it's yours. When I hear this I know that the person it was written in memory of is captured... More importantly, the subject of whether gender matters I felt was properly addressed here.

And poetry is not music. Not even when read. There is a difference, and should be.

thelitcorner 2 years ago

beautiful just simply that i have no more words.

CelticRaE19 3 years ago

I did not get the author of the poet. Is it you, Kicesie?

dsmoya31410 3 years ago

Yes, I wrote this.

thelitcorner 3 years ago

You are not alone.

BigBrother2039 3 years ago

oh my goodness girl, breathtaking. If only i could write something like this. I listened to this about 5 times, it really touched me...please keep sharing your beautiful work

I think you are an amazing person!

sulli5577 3 years ago 6

This is amazing.

tigeress1001 3 years ago

wow loved it...but lol yes,yes Herbal essence shampoo couldn't help but laugh

minec123 3 years ago 4

Very, very well done.

Amazing and powerful.

SceneRyRy 3 years ago

i really liked the inclusion of Yes! Herbal Essence shampoo! It made me laugh

Menacexp 3 years ago

Even though I am a poet myself, I typically can't stand reading or listening to other peoples poetry. For whatever reason, other peoples writing styles just hit me like nails on a chalkboard. But I must say that this piece is one of those rare exceptions, very well done.

SWDenverjuggalo 3 years ago

@SWDenverjuggalo: I find your comment somewhat offensive. It's like some people who fancy themselves writers who refuse to read. I've met several people like that, and promise you that their writing made it abundantly clear that they knew nothing of 'authorship'. It is a craft as well as an art, and by refusing to read anything by anyone else, they have learned nothing. To excel at one's art, one must have a lot of exposure to work of others, this goes for ALL art. It is 99% love, or should be.

2hotinaz 3 years ago

Beautiful.

jillymsane 3 years ago

. . . forever and a day, until the sun itself burns itself away.

ReliableInsider 3 years ago

Kicesie, this is so beautiful, powerful, and true. Thank-you. You have moved me.

yowee1234 3 years ago

Bravo!!! That was just beautiful. A deep loving meaning, that just moved me. Wonderful! Thank you!

stindeck 3 years ago

Two souls intertwine

Yes! Herbal Essence shampoo!

Old man scratches head

rrjpfsmjp 3 years ago

Good performance! I liked how you read it. I'm curious to see whether you're looking for all genres of writing, or mainly sexy.

JasonMelancon 3 years ago

All accept all genres. It will depend mostly on people not using copyrighted material and how well they read/recite it... :-) The topic matters little...

thelitcorner 3 years ago

I'm not entirely sure what to think of it. But I think you did capture the essence of what u were trying to bring across, so that gets a thumbs up ! What I also like is that you didn't do an overkill of metaphores as a lot of people tend to do. Thank you for that ;)

slaQ83 3 years ago

It would have been nice to see a three or four some in the mix of visuals.

saintearth 3 years ago

It was about two souls intertwined... this poem didn't venture beyond that.

thelitcorner 3 years ago

nice writing, but if you would be so accepting to allow me to give you a little criticism

try speeding up and slowing down the emphasize different parts while reading... and try not to use the same words too much

other than that, it was very beautiful and TRUE :)

itsmejennxxk 3 years ago 2

Respect.

borndemented86 3 years ago

I love it.... great job

babyjudy8806 3 years ago

wow intence passion

bullfrog099 3 years ago

Beautiful write. I look forward to more poetry in the future. :)

HaleyMary 3 years ago

Well. I came to the conclusion a long time ago that you and I see the world very differently and that I was probably never going to be successful in getting into your head and really understanding you. And I've been fine with that. It's been OK that I don't always understand where you are coming from or going to.

Until now.

"...Yes! Yes! Herbal Essence Shampoo!"

I'll be pondering that for awhile.

:)

rrjpfsmjp 3 years ago

Don't you remember those commercials? Where the women using the shampoo enjoyed the smell and/or feel so much they shouted 'yes yes!' almost like an orgasm? :-) Popular commercials for a long time about 7 or so years ago?

thelitcorner 3 years ago

LOL we had those commercials in Norway too - the only difference is, we still see them on TV from time to time.

Nice poem, Kicesie. You considered doing something with your poems?

HannaMGA 3 years ago

Oh yeah, now that you remind me I do remember those commercials.

Getting old can be such a pain. You finally have all the money you need to buy the things you always wanted only to discover that you can't remember what those things are anymore :)

Well, at least now I can spend my time pondering where I left my car keys instead of what that line in your poem was about.

rrjpfsmjp 3 years ago

rrjpfsmjp ... you' old?

I mean ,i noticed your comments seep intelligence but you also display an uncharacteristic open-mindness for an old person (if you indeed are old) that's why i didn't imagine...(by the way,i noticed you answered one of my comments and i was about to send you a reply but i had some problems and the message got lost in translation...a nicer way of saying how dumb i was for not keeping backups...it was a rather large reply,meant to impress you :P gonna send you another,soon)

scorpion27101987 3 years ago

Yup,i remember them too... they've gotten as far as eastern Europe ... at a first glance,the poem seems to be exactly what it seems to be,but (mostly) unfortunately (/although there are good surprises from life too,my balance is tilted strongly towards the negative side of the axis :-( /) life teaches us time and again that many things are far more than meets the eye,so i'll have to sleep on it to get a more accurate impression... ,but i like it.

scorpion27101987 3 years ago