I fuck up a lot when I read rhymes, so introductions are something I end up repeating over and over and over again each time I fuck up. I don't memorize my poetry, I read it off from the computer screen in front of me, hence why I'm looking up. Isn't my typical poem since this was simply a reply to someone else's poem. Thanks for the critiquing though.
This is really monotonous. Your "lead" is buried and it could have been in a much more pleasing format. One would be to scroll the text of what you say over the screen.
Plus it would have been good to have an introduction.
Plus, if you are going to read into a camera. make sure you look natural. Not like you are in some sort of trance, looking up.
I fuck up a lot when I read rhymes, so introductions are something I end up repeating over and over and over again each time I fuck up. I don't memorize my poetry, I read it off from the computer screen in front of me, hence why I'm looking up. Isn't my typical poem since this was simply a reply to someone else's poem. Thanks for the critiquing though.
PuzpoliticMind 1 month ago
This is really monotonous. Your "lead" is buried and it could have been in a much more pleasing format. One would be to scroll the text of what you say over the screen.
Plus it would have been good to have an introduction.
Plus, if you are going to read into a camera. make sure you look natural. Not like you are in some sort of trance, looking up.
petphotog 1 month ago