If you let your opening changes go around 4 times ( C Em Am Bb F ) in standard tuning adding drums and a killer bubblin' bass line for the second pass.Adding thickener (keys)with a melody lead line (sax or guitar)that suggests your vocal line in passes 3 and 4. Then everyone pull way back for your vocal in the first verse.With the right treatment that would be a good opening hook. Maybe a little rewrite in that part that's different from the verse and chorus with Aug chords. Larzman producer:)
I really love this song Zorrothar. It gently reminds me of the early days of the Beatles. Something Paul might have written. Have you ever considered what treatment to use if it was recorded in a studio? You seem real comfortable with those nice changes and melody. Maybe just a little rushed - well done though.
Thanks very much Larzman2! That's high praise indeed. I've thought about using my university's studio to record this song in, but not much about how exactly I'd go about that. Any ideas? I think it was a little rushed because i wanted to get it recorded before the daylight disappeared! Thanks again.
!! THE NEW YOUTUBE LAYOUT IS SO BAD, i didn't even see this in my subscriptions box.
i seriously hate youtube for depriving me of this for two days. but whatever. i love it and you.
i had to minimize the window so that i could appreciate the song, otherwise i probably wouldn't have paid attention, just saying. that was a compliment if you were wondering.
but whatever, i put your songs on a quicklist while i'm doing horribly boring history assignments and it makes things a little less miserable.
You seem to have stolen your guitar riff from another song and the lyrics are cliched and trite.
mcooley386 9 months ago
reminds me of "semi-charmed life." I liked it man.
tennisnuts 1 year ago
amaaazzinggg!!!!!!!! :D beautiful voice and wonderful guitar playing :D
redfoxwolf5 1 year ago
my band is called Honor Amongst Thieves ;)
Youre good man
JeremyReidable 2 years ago
This is awesome. i cant believe i just found your channel now! O_O
AnaDaBanana 2 years ago
I really like this! Great job
MandaHill 3 years ago
I love this! Very nice.
Continue your good job :-)
favorited and 500000 heartstars.
Thank you so much for sharing
tayounorise 3 years ago
If you let your opening changes go around 4 times ( C Em Am Bb F ) in standard tuning adding drums and a killer bubblin' bass line for the second pass.Adding thickener (keys)with a melody lead line (sax or guitar)that suggests your vocal line in passes 3 and 4. Then everyone pull way back for your vocal in the first verse.With the right treatment that would be a good opening hook. Maybe a little rewrite in that part that's different from the verse and chorus with Aug chords. Larzman producer:)
Larzman2 3 years ago
I really love this song Zorrothar. It gently reminds me of the early days of the Beatles. Something Paul might have written. Have you ever considered what treatment to use if it was recorded in a studio? You seem real comfortable with those nice changes and melody. Maybe just a little rushed - well done though.
Larzman2 3 years ago
Thanks very much Larzman2! That's high praise indeed. I've thought about using my university's studio to record this song in, but not much about how exactly I'd go about that. Any ideas? I think it was a little rushed because i wanted to get it recorded before the daylight disappeared! Thanks again.
Zorrothar 3 years ago
awesome song, like the lyrics, keep it up, some cracking songs, shouldnt be long until you start charging people to hear them.
rossmaccamusic 3 years ago
awesome song, like the lyrics, keep it up, some cracking songs, shouldnt be long until you start charging people to hear them.
rossmaccamusic 3 years ago
This was great and
made my night mate
freeatlast1963 3 years ago 3
!! THE NEW YOUTUBE LAYOUT IS SO BAD, i didn't even see this in my subscriptions box.
i seriously hate youtube for depriving me of this for two days. but whatever. i love it and you.
i had to minimize the window so that i could appreciate the song, otherwise i probably wouldn't have paid attention, just saying. that was a compliment if you were wondering.
but whatever, i put your songs on a quicklist while i'm doing horribly boring history assignments and it makes things a little less miserable.
ishootblankz 3 years ago
Glad you found it eventually, and that you like it! I had the exact same problem with subscriptions...sucks!
Zorrothar 3 years ago
Fantastic lyrics. Oh, and those music bits. All grouse, this song.
FiPfft 3 years ago 3
Hey thanks!
*quickly looks up grouse in dictionary of colloquialisms, can't find it, assumes it's a good thing*
Zorrothar 3 years ago
No problem!
(Oh yes, grouse is very positive).
*quietly curses self for using such words without realising*
FiPfft 3 years ago
yes.<3
BrittBonshor 3 years ago
Excellent! Fun and insightful at the same time.
Oswlek 3 years ago 3
Real excellent work! Very, VERY professional.
5 stars and favorited
PMiddy001 3 years ago