Great Chorus dude, good job on the singing. For the rap, bring it a little harder. Try and match the personality of the song in your voice. So for this song you want to sound a little more passionate. Almost like you're speaking over the voice of other people in a room. If this makes your mic peak(or crack), stand up two pillows on sides of the microphone and stand a little further away. For inspiration I listen to rappers that made songs with similar beats to get ideas.
i like the beginning, but man you gottta put more emotion to tell your story, rap is a story man, you gotta keep people interested in your story, keep up the work though, dont stop
this is on point homie i just subbed my g but when ever you have free time plz check out my page trust me i wont let you down lol....im not on some lil b shit
HEY!!! :D LOVE THE SONG!! U REALLY HAVE GREAT TALENT!! :D HOPE I CAN HEAR MORE SOON! :D
TheJusbeinme 1 day ago
DAMN!!!!! brah Real NICE
7MrDivine 1 day ago
This beat is so dope! I like this chill vibe too.
TheOfficialJimmyP 2 days ago
man, you got some serious talent
this can be a hit :D nice job and keep it real!
niggasinparis213 2 days ago
@niggasinparis213 thank u fam means alot much luv
selfdestruction928 2 days ago
kul song! :)
Catolol4695 3 days ago
@Catolol4695 Thanks
selfdestruction928 3 days ago
Dope! :D
JoeJasRapKid 3 days ago
this is a beat that can definitely get stuck in my head xDD
TorchwoodRocks145 4 days ago
love the chorus !
LanettZKing 4 days ago
not bad
sourcreamandchips 4 days ago
Nice
smithree7733 4 days ago
@smithree7733 thank u
selfdestruction928 4 days ago
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narmak1997 5 days ago
love it bro nice rap, nice voice and nice beat
jaydenluvsboy 5 days ago
@jaydenluvsboy thank u glad u love it if u can please "LIKE" my facebook page and download my mixtape
selfdestruction928 5 days ago
i loved it !! great joop ^^ !!
Destinyomgbieber 6 days ago
@Destinyomgbieber thank u and if u can plz download my mixtape & "LIKE" Me on Facebook
selfdestruction928 6 days ago
disney cuz my neice and nephew love it so much. and i wanted to start off small with it.
lyricalmastermind16 6 days ago
@lyricalmastermind16 oh nice thats good
selfdestruction928 6 days ago
really good i fuccs wth it
MzVeenie 1 week ago
@MzVeenie thank u glad u like it
selfdestruction928 6 days ago
u got lots a talent like it :)
AntwansMommy 1 week ago
@AntwansMommy thank u and if u like please download my mixtape and "LIKE" me a facebook
selfdestruction928 1 week ago
bro, you got some talent. im tryna become a rapper on disney or something. but i have no idea where to start.
lyricalmastermind16 1 week ago
@lyricalmastermind16 thank u bro and y on disney
selfdestruction928 1 week ago
Hell yeahhhh.
Keep risinnng!
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MyxBlackBalloon 1 week ago
@MyxBlackBalloon thank u
selfdestruction928 1 week ago
This is really good really
AriYanna77979 1 week ago
nice:) i luv it=D
kayliegirlishere 1 week ago
@kayliegirlishere thank u also please "LIKE" me on facebook
selfdestruction928 1 week ago
Very nice!
MsQueenLis 1 week ago
@MsQueenLis thank u
selfdestruction928 1 week ago
thats a jam id bump good job bro what program u use? well if i can know
MannyHdz303 1 week ago
@MannyHdz303 thx 4 the love bro and i use adobe audition 1,5
selfdestruction928 1 week ago
awesome song. we should colab sometime.
mileytoad 1 week ago
@mileytoad yea im down anytime jus hit me up wit a message
selfdestruction928 1 week ago
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mileytoad 1 week ago
@selfdestruction928 you got it
mileytoad 1 week ago
Great Chorus dude, good job on the singing. For the rap, bring it a little harder. Try and match the personality of the song in your voice. So for this song you want to sound a little more passionate. Almost like you're speaking over the voice of other people in a room. If this makes your mic peak(or crack), stand up two pillows on sides of the microphone and stand a little further away. For inspiration I listen to rappers that made songs with similar beats to get ideas.
Keep it up man.
Jgibby10x 1 week ago
@Jgibby10x thank u for the great advice much luv
selfdestruction928 1 week ago
Nice jam..koo shit
TheRealistOne661 1 week ago
@TheRealistOne661 thank u bro
selfdestruction928 1 week ago
sound nice . keep up the good job .
mrJBH69 1 week ago
@mrJBH69 thank u glad u like it
selfdestruction928 1 week ago
*dizz shyt fye !!.....(meanin gud)
kearia951 1 week ago
@kearia951 haha thank u much luv
selfdestruction928 1 week ago
@selfdestruction928 ur welcum...luv iht...<3
kearia951 6 days ago
i like the beginning, but man you gottta put more emotion to tell your story, rap is a story man, you gotta keep people interested in your story, keep up the work though, dont stop
TheRealSKitSo 1 week ago
@TheRealSKitSo thx fam thx 4 the advice
selfdestruction928 1 week ago
Str8 ,just the first part before the rappin
3ndofstoryy 1 week ago
Wack
SwavyEntertainment 1 week ago
@SwavyEntertainment thx 4 da hate
selfdestruction928 1 week ago
garbage. but keep doin it. you'll get better
THECrackasaurus 1 week ago
PRETTY GUUD! :)
va1lerie 1 week ago
@va1lerie thank u
selfdestruction928 1 week ago
you know i almost bought this beat..
JaeStacksMusic 1 week ago
@JaeStacksMusic really datz koo
selfdestruction928 1 week ago
this is great keep i love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
MORRIS91205 1 week ago
@MORRIS91205 thank u glad u love it
selfdestruction928 1 week ago
good shit bruh keep doin yo thang
dubinfluenced 1 week ago
@dubinfluenced thank u homie
selfdestruction928 1 week ago
It's better than wat lil wanye is sayin..
typerhatch670 1 week ago
@typerhatch670 thank u much luv
selfdestruction928 1 week ago
#salute i like the message n the production is perfect for the tone of the song as a whole!
keep up the grind n craft!
check out my channel also
gahdisWORLD 1 week ago
@gahdisWORLD thank u glad u like it and sure i will
selfdestruction928 1 week ago
Just not good...
phstewie 1 week ago
@phstewie k
selfdestruction928 1 week ago
I WANNA THANK EVERYONE WHO CHECKED OUT MY VIDEO LETZ KEEP IT COMIN LETS REACH 2000 VIEWS PLEASE SHARE WITH YOUR FRIENDS -MR. 5P
selfdestruction928 1 week ago
Don't send me fucking videos, shit sucks , keeeeep dreaming
gaddisboy14 1 week ago
@gaddisboy14 thx 4 da hate hahaha dont get mad haha dis better den da wack shyt people talkin about money get real
selfdestruction928 1 week ago
we should collab
yungngmb1 1 week ago
@yungngmb1 im down fam
selfdestruction928 1 week ago
its real nice it sounds like an old rap nice real nice keep it up!!
VeronicaMarcano1991 2 weeks ago
video???plz..lol
VeronicaMarcano1991 2 weeks ago
cool! nice beat!
findlovethevideo 2 weeks ago
@findlovethevideo thank u
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
Very nice.
SHEaTVa 2 weeks ago
@SHEaTVa thank u
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
Great music be sure to check my music out as well shout outs from yuh BOY STATEKK OUT THE 2-1-0 TEXAS, WE NEED TO COLLAB PLAYUH
Statek210 2 weeks ago
@Statek210 thx fam and yea im down 2 collab jus send me ur beat wit and open verse so i can spit my verse
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
@selfdestruction928 thats a betttttt
Statek210 2 weeks ago
Dude your free album rocks! I love it
staffitup 2 weeks ago
@staffitup thank u fam much luv
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
Smooth =]
Redd9990 2 weeks ago
@Redd9990 thank u
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
Great man I subbed
staffitup 2 weeks ago
@staffitup thank u
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
nice 1
oliverkay101 2 weeks ago
@oliverkay101 thank u
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
iLike It
CaamAndMona 2 weeks ago
@CaamAndMona thank u glad u like it
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
good job.keep going
jimterlos 2 weeks ago
@jimterlos thank u and i will
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
Cool song keep up the good work
Javiermsob 2 weeks ago
@Javiermsob thank u
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
I lovee this shyyy
babyboolovesumore 2 weeks ago
@babyboolovesumore thank u
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
@Selfdestruction928 you will bruh jus keep dem hits kmn
mellomell99 2 weeks ago
@selfdestruction928 yea I jus downloaded it u a good rapper u should get signed soon
mellomell99 2 weeks ago
@mellomell99 thank u and i rlly hope so that if they notice me lol
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
@Selfdestruction928 this shit so smooth and laid bak big ups on dis one really kool song
mellomell99 2 weeks ago
@mellomell99 thank u and if u can please "LIKE" My Facebook page and download my mixtape
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
Damnnn, really NICE!!!! xD
MissBoricuafication 2 weeks ago
@MissBoricuafication thank u
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
anything better than i can do but shave dude XD
mrmarksmanftw1 2 weeks ago
nice...
rockhardtears 2 weeks ago
@rockhardtears thx
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
Good one man, just try to expand your lyrics a little more.
RobClayJoker 2 weeks ago
@RobClayJoker thank u make sure 2 download my mixtape and "LIKE" My Facebook Page Please
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
this sonq qooes doown n_n ♥iloove it (:
Ananihta 2 weeks ago
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selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
@selfdestruction928 fersuure(:♥
Ananihta 2 weeks ago
Nice song.! :)
babygurl2009hot 2 weeks ago
@babygurl2009hot thank u
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
I like this :) ty!
shady4ever33 2 weeks ago
@shady4ever33 no thank u 5 checkin it out much luv
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
cool!=)
SabriXPanik 2 weeks ago
@SabriXPanik thank u
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
nice chill ass beat man i fuck with that
MyFNzilla 2 weeks ago
@MyFNzilla thx fam much luv and if u can download my mixtape and please "LIKE" My Facebook page
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
Awh this is the kinda music I love<3 (:
lilcheetoez16 2 weeks ago
@lilcheetoez16 thank u 4 the love
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
@selfdestruction928 Welcome(:
lilcheetoez16 2 weeks ago
@lilcheetoez16 if u would like download my mixtape and plz "LIKE" My FB Page
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
It was good:)
SarahLuvsYa210 2 weeks ago
@SarahLuvsYa210 thank u
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
nice ;D
MadGirl268 2 weeks ago
@MadGirl268 thnk u
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
ur right i didnt regret this and now all my friends r watchin this cause i showed them
21kate4 2 weeks ago
@21kate4 thank u It meANS aLOT
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
@selfdestruction928 no prob!
21kate4 2 weeks ago
Dam bro you could go big man, keep this shit up, this real shit right here!
TheGtown4life 2 weeks ago 2
@TheGtown4life thank u bro it means alot
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
This is awesome
Holmboi27 2 weeks ago
@Holmboi27 thank u
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
this is pretty good (:
browneyes2595 2 weeks ago
@browneyes2595 thank u
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
its good :)
CypriotSwag 2 weeks ago
@CypriotSwag thank u plz also "LIKE" my music page on facebook if u have one
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
this is on point homie i just subbed my g but when ever you have free time plz check out my page trust me i wont let you down lol....im not on some lil b shit
TheRealMistaBroadway 2 weeks ago
@TheRealMistaBroadway thank u if u can plz "LIKE" my facebook music page plz
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
well .. that pretty good ceep goin mannn !!
bas20bsb 2 weeks ago
@bas20bsb thank u much luv
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
very nice keep up the good work :)
shayan894 2 weeks ago
@shayan894 thank u very much
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
IF YOU GUYZ HAVE A FACEBOOK PLEASE GO "LIKE" MY MUSIC PAGE
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
cool
thanx i like it
CindyMaterpiece 2 weeks ago
@CindyMaterpiece thank u
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
@selfdestruction928 :)
u deserve it
CindyMaterpiece 2 weeks ago
This is pretty good, Keep working. (:
LyricGirl9 2 weeks ago
thx a lot
12mirandacosgrovefan 2 weeks ago
@12mirandacosgrovefan no prob
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
cool!
cheeseits13 2 weeks ago
@cheeseits13 thx
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
NICE!
mrjossi97 2 weeks ago
@mrjossi97 thx
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
I like ;)
ANNiiKA99 2 weeks ago
@ANNiiKA99 thank u if u have a facebook can u please like music page
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
Thanks for sending this to me! I like it, Dawg
FolkBoyify 2 weeks ago
@FolkBoyify thank u homie much luv
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
good stuff!!
99heartbreaker99 2 weeks ago
@99heartbreaker99 thank u
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
its amazing nice job:) i luv it :D
mskaylie89 2 weeks ago
@mskaylie89 thank u very much
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
it's not for me ; ) PeacE !
LinuxTutorialPL 2 weeks ago
@LinuxTutorialPL k
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
Ratings have been disabled for this video because its fucking ghey
KillEveryoneKillPhil 2 weeks ago
@KillEveryoneKillPhil k
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
Too Tough Gud Shit Bro. U Can Defo Make It. Hmu If Ya Ever Need A Beat. (Trap Beat) I Make Bangers Lmao.
xBlackOpsGeniusx 2 weeks ago
@xBlackOpsGeniusx thank u bro much luv and i will hit u up
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
Kool :]
xXTheeAwesomeOneXx 2 weeks ago
@xXTheeAwesomeOneXx thanks
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
thats awsome
Dramaqueen16ful 2 weeks ago
@Dramaqueen16ful thank u
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago
amazing, this is amazing! :-) keep it going
xlolnoobx1 2 weeks ago
@xlolnoobx1 thank u thank u
selfdestruction928 2 weeks ago