Nightly Stroll

[XineedyouuX]

wellldone thats quitee good (:

[qualqui]

Interestin' story,....moral of the story, don't ever PANIC,....YOU could lose your life! Thumbs up to ya WarningSeries and thankin' ya for the GREAT share! = )

[navajoring]

i dont know maybe a better voice making u know i dont but i dont read much books man so i like it though....

[22LoveLife25]

[: love the story. try not to use the word "became" a lot though. you have great transition words, but just have a little more variety. also, put in a little more detail in your writing. have the girls speak more too. [: like i said, great start though. im not trying to insult you either though just giving some advice [:

[WarningSeries]

@22LoveLife25  thanks

[6Ed6]

you should put in moar detail of the stalker's appearance like having a large grin, huge teeth always make anything scary

I'm just 15, sorry if i make no sense

[martron3000]

I thought of another "twist" ending as I was listening to this.

The girls took out their knives and attacked the strange man following them in a fit of fear and desperation. They end up stabbing him to death, only to discover to their horror the man is one of the girls' father, who was just keeping an eye on them to protect them from the real killer.

Good story...sort of "Twilight-zone" type.

[handgun559]

well why wouldent they look

[bam22056]

it was really cliche

[Plantfoodinc]

good story, however, if you're willing to accept some constructive criticism, you could be a little more descriptive with your word choices. I am not insulting you, nor am I a proffessional writer, I'm just saying what I think.

[WarningSeries]

Yea.. of course. I love constructive criticism.

Thanks.

[Vgirl239]

I love it!!!!!

please make another story?

[WarningSeries]

Thanks a lot. I have another story I will be placing on youtube in less than a week. Please subscribe in order to hear them.

[mar8kov]

really good story, I like that drawing

[captianmo574]

really good scary story all my friends and family thinks so too.

[64118]

really nice when the book comes out tell me so i can buy it

[Maninshades13]

That was really good ^_^ It had sort of a "Andy Horowits" feel to it.

[profanitys]

this sucks :(

[707RipOtee]

good story, maybe give the town an actual name?

[WarningSeries]

Good idea...I'll do that... I'm still working on all of them though.

[707RipOtee]

yeah! Spice it up.

[theitchitcher3]

nice vid

[dualbrush]

nice story

[6020e3]

interesting

[spardaking]

not scary at all, 1 stat

[LAYADR]

nice

[XoMissyMissoX]

very nice.

[jjobie]

Good job...I also had a couple of ideas while watching it: you could consider adding some subtle background music, and maybe a few more pictures illustrating scenes from the story - would make it even more entertaining as a video.

[currant101]

:-S Thats scary

But very good story and nice clear voice

[rockon325]

Chuck Norris is like that.

[tymki]

Nice. I'm thinking of doing my own short stories like this.

[NeroDevilBringer666]

Nice man!

[0Bubbles0roks0]

i like it

[94HEATH94]

cool

[LordSirpiko]

ya know this really wasnt that bad at all!

if you have time post more =)

[socks1w]

sounds like an interesting book.

[greyfox1845]

Dang, nice job!

[GrayFox2k8]

i hate sad stories =/

[Renalvr9]

Really interesting, I like it!

[WarningSeries]

Thanks man!

[elblanco93]

oh.thanks..

[elblanco93]

okay im a lil slow here..who died at the end?plz reply.lol

[WarningSeries]

hmm I don't wanna give the ending here, but i'll message you

[flynnryan]

Nice twist/cliff hanger ending. There are 3 likely endings.

1. The mysterious guy killed the friend who couldn't readily defend herself with the proababaly Swiss Army knife. they're one thing to have, another to get open.

2. the "scared" friend killed the guy and foolishly left behind the weapon.

3. A third party killed one and abducted the other.

[Nevuser]

nice job i liked the ending

[WarningSeries]

Thanks.

[UB3RL33TCHICK3N]

I like better how you actually filmed it.

It's funny to see.

[WarningSeries]

lol... you know what . I think I'm gonna do that too. Good idea.

[historydudeguy]

like i said in my message interesting